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Another one...Another one...dundunnndun~~~~*Waves Fingers*

I'm trying to knock these out, school tomorrow. The more I do today, the less (I think) I'll have to do later...anyway (I love the word, Anway~~~*Speaks Softly*)

LET US BEGIIIIIIIN!!

First chapter has like 53.3k on it *Frowns* ugh, I'm going to get hate mail ...cool, *Smiles Brightly*

First and foremost, *deep breath* ENOUGH WITH BLACK WOMEN AND LONG HAIR!!!! I get there are some of us with luscious locks that are all the way down to our bottoms, but—but I am tired of seeing that in the descriptions. Stop, over! end it.

The entire time the character is talking; I could imagine a frizzy short bob. Literally her entire monologue is setting you up for like. Halle Berry before she became Cat woman.

Physically, I cringe when I see that in like every story, long hair, long hair, long hair. Stop, braids, dreads, corn rolls, afros, twist outs, straightened, permed cropped, feather cut, bald. We have so many hair styles, that long and straight is the least interesting of the lot. Descriptions must match the character...she doesn't seem the I like longhair group, more like I have short hair and I don't even want to deal with that much hair group...rant over, shhhh continuing with my reading.

BUT GOOD JOB ON BUILDING A REAL LIFE CHARACTER!! She isn't overly sexifed, or one dimension, or had some bloated ego. Gahd, bless you Author Mam!

And oh, what I love most~~She hasn't an admiring group of friends to lavish her with false compliments, loooove it.

Oooh wee, she got action, Italian and knowledge of brands and shit. I like this, *makes stank face* It guoood.

So, translation~~Again apparently the most popular authors are those who actually know how to build characters, and Gio is a character. I enjoyed him, and his cousins and the by play...it was a little bit obvious that this chapter would lead to the swat team or police coming in, but~~~I'm a really, really heavy reader so any story line I can pretty much, decipher with in the first five chapters or first forty minutes of a movie. 

 MY BANE, IT'S A HORRID SKILL THAT RUINS MOVIES FOR ME AND FAMILY!!!

Le'sigh, I digress let's get back to it. *Cracks Knuckles*

WHY ARE THEY ALWAYS OVER 6'0 THAT'S FUCKING BIG PEOPLE!! A man could be good at a solid 6'1, or 5'9.... he can be deadly, and sexy at average height!!! It'd be way more realistic...~~~ I was going to add something here but I refrained *Cough*

I just adore the girls voice, it's not drony, it doesn't make me roll my eyes with the hope it's over. This author clearly understands how to write in the "voice" of character. She also has the ability of writing just enough, but not a paragraph of blabber.

I love writers who write just the right amount, and don't kill me with everything in their heads. (Yes, I die from boredom, often. *narrows eyes at you* "What? Wanna fight about it?")

This writer is awesome. The end. Hahaha yeah right!!

I love this story, and there are flaws but as I say in all my chapters I got to chapter Three, and I enjoyed it...doesn't mean that there aren't things to solve such as, maybe a little more description and god don't write so little I need 2,000 words the shortest lol.

I do hope the main girl doesn't suddenly fall for the main character, and god knows if you the reader enjoy chapter 1-3, you'll really enjoy chapter 3 to when ever she deigns to finish her story (She being sketchy and withholding goodness people!!! cAll the Wattpad PoPo's)

Okay~~~Anways~~~This story is perfect for those moments you want something with a little more substance, and not something purely romances, It's perfect when you lying in bed and bored. You just finished arguing with someone, this is perfect to distract you. BROKEN BY THE MAFIA...CHECK IT OUT, OR EAT MY FABR—BRII AGA SOMETHING LOL!!

SYWAR HONESTY!!! OUT!!

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