So...I'm back, by high, HIGH demand...it's something when three to four people look you up for their review lmao. I was all like, wait let me enjoy my pina colada....nope, my drinking is on hold this wonderful july fourth morning, because I shall bash through these Reviews....Le'GO!

(Summary: Gaeluv Lehdom known simply as the Upper Realm is a world not unlike the Human Realm. For decades it has been plagued by the Great War: a brutal struggle between the Regime and the Rebels. In a final bid for freedom the Rebels place their trust in one young soldier. His name is Remington. They believe that the magic of old has marked him to be the Warrior, or protector, of Las Spes: three siblings destined to change the fate of an entire world.)

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Why am I reading this? I mean sure, I could say that my eyes for great writing is far beyond the rest who only seek out the completed, or romantic...yet this is a moment I shall regret.

IT'S GOOD! *looks around annoyed * why am I reviewing such work?! The opening is reminiscent...

Harry Potter, the kind of openings that J.K. Rowling is well known for. (Yeah, I changed the font and size)

So...o, basically it opens with an old, weathered man who has left his world for ours, and doesn't particularly seem interested in dealing with this supposed war brewing in his country.

Anyway...*strong eye roll* I hope there is something here I can complain about it, *looks at author with narrowed eyed disgust* blech, don't make this one of those "nice" reviews.

Chapter one...

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Chapter Two....Annoyance growing!!!

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Can I be honest.....I don't understand...like really, really don't understand....this is good, I mean it's interesting the set up, and it would have been nice to be in chapter one, if we'd met he female character before the attack, and then switched over to mens view....The later chapter, which means we are going into the third chapter...yeah I skipped a lot, because YOU had to ACTUALLY write well....not that, that's a problem...tsk, not like I want to write a review about only bad, works...or something. It's not like I get something out of writing actual advise for people who nee....d, it tsk.

Anyway, I do think the bulk of audience, (depending on who you're targeting) would probably get caught better, if you made the school daze chapter two, and the so it begins chapter the third one. It would bring out the "oh, this is about a modern day girl" then with the hot mister Remington, it drags in some teenage girls who are into this genre. (Which let's be real are the bulk of Wattpad.... some of them appreciate real good stories.

And the tags, might need some finagling...like fantasy, adventure, family, and romance (doesn't really have to be there, it's all for the trap shhhh, and war, and historical fanatasy also works...and don't forget TalkthePOC.... don't forget to tag all avenues.

I will also say...that despite the adept twirl of a pen this author has, it would be of interest add in some humor, not in only weighty gestures but something to make the readers laugh and enjoy the day to day, rather than only giving us exactly the story.... I don't know how to describe it, but I think this author can translate well.

Anyway...Check out DeneRose Prisoner of Fate it's going in the hall of annoyingly-good-writers-who-request-reviews-to-annoy-me fame. Oh, and I think a different cover would drag in some more readers as well...I could offer my skills, but their soo...o basice, aske Andromeda lol.

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