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Over, and Over again I tried to tell myself that WE~~~~ could never be more than a Page~~~! Yep, yep another one, another one...I'm doing these back to back...hahahahah *cries*

S0~~LET'S BEGIN!!!                     

Can I just say...*hrm*AMAZING OPENING!!!

It was a little awkward when she trailed off to talk about the fox, but it was great opening. The summary may be the thing keeping the story back, but the treasure underneath it is worth!!

You are following a mysterious fox into the woods...umm, let's say an obvious fantasy book move. I mean have any of our readers chased their weird ass pet into the woods...no, no. Okay, just like paranormal leave that trick to die..or whatever lol *Glares at you all* be offended if you want to be, I ain't got cares

Realism in the leaving your phone behind...though I'm a cell phone addict, that wouldn't happen unless I was at home. IPHONe, on deck y'all.

I'm sorry, but if a troll started chasing me...this is TN >.> I would head to whitest looking house, I'm talking they would have to have a big ass truck, because someone in that house is going to have a gun...just saying, I don't do Trolls, orcs, or hell hounds.

Supernatural that crapt!

"Dean, my gun." "Sam...just stay sexy."

Umm, tell me. Why am I confused on whether the main characters is a guy or girl, I mean was it established whether this is a guy or girl, Or did I miss that somewhere in the beginning or ending or middle...~~~~yeah, it needs to be super obvious.

WHY ARE PRETTY GIRLS ALWAYS BLONDE?!!!  I'm not blonde and I'm gorgeous, I'm sure you are too writer, and readers...why always~~~blonde, out of the millions of colors bloooooonde!!!

Gandalf stick...lol *snickers* Ah. It's a girl.

The story had a little bit of a masculine tone to it.

Pyro! We have a fire started, nothing like a threat to our family to make us go Ape! It's enjoyable to read, I thought for a moment it would be drawn out but, the writer manages to end scenes right before I start feeling like I'm reading a text book.

Righ after the main character finds out she'd "adopted" boom, thick and smashed paragraph that I'm supposed to read...umml, skipping~~.

AnywaY! This aside for a little bitty rush towards the plot, This story isn't half bad. Probably needs a better cover to attract more readers. It's actually pretty interesting as we are going towards a Fae school. So if you like Vampire Academy, Harry Potter. Or Magic, the show currently out on Sci-Fy, you'll probably like this. The writer is consistent and isn't half bad.

A little more break in the paragraphs...May I point out, that paragraphs at least are five sentences...let that swirl in your heads writer...let it swirl~!

Anyway, this story is good for those people who love adventure, tide with school. I would read this, after a bath, or in the bath tub...you bubbles!! So is my only judgement worth listening, to...N o...p...E!!! Go Out and discover WINGS, for yourself okay, OKAY!!!

Sywar Honesty Out!!