BOOK TITLE : Sistas Forever.

REVIEWER: SinaMW1209

AUTHOR: PriscillaYiadom4

GENRE: Chicklit

COVER: - 6.5/10

The cover is nice, but I think to attract readers more, you should change the colour of the background as when the dark brown clashes with the faceclaims’ skin, it doesn’t look that clear. Everything else is nice and simple, but with a bit more improvement the cover will look better.

BOOK TITLE: - 8/10

Well, the title is nice and different. I don’t know if making ‘sisters’ ‘sistas’ intentional, but it still is unique and I couldn’t find any stories with the same name. It also suits the story and what the book is about. 

BLURB/STORY DESCRIPTION: - 5/10

I think the blurb needs a bit more improvement to it. Now, since it’s a collection of stories, we can’t really write a huge blurb, but maybe you could add a quote to show the strength of black women. You could maybe also add an incident which happens in one of your stories, to create more interest. With more improvement, your blurb will certainly be better. 

PAGE LAYOUT: - 7/10

The page layout was good and understandable but I don’t think it was necessary to divide each sentence into paragraphs. Your chapters or short stories overall rarely had 500 words and I personally think you should have at least written 1200 words. Well, nevertheless, the page layout was good, so good job.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: - 6.5/10  

The character de elopement was good but there was cases where I couldn’t understand what the character was feeling or trying to say to the reader. Since it’s a collection of short stories, I noticed that your character development got a bit better after each story, so you’re showing a great improvement. Keep it up!

GRAMMAR/VOCABULARY/SPELLING: - 4/10  

I understand if English isn’t your first language but I think you need to improve a lot and pay more attention to your grammar. You had used incorrect use of capitalization in many cases and you had also used incorrect punctuation marks too. In some situations, you hadn’t capitalized the names such as ‘Candy’ but you should have since it’s a proper noun. I’ll help you a bit more with your grammar. 

Capitalization cases

What you wrote:- Khloe was at a friend’s house when her Phone beeped.

What you should have written:- Khloe was at a friend’s house when her phone beeped. 

Punctuation cases

What you wrote:- “Candy decided to become a Warrior princess.” 

What you should have written:- Candy decides to become a warrior princess. (Note that you didn’t have to use quotation marks)

Tense cases

What you wrote:- “Lisa’s mother asked her if she and Jane want pancakes for breakfast. “Lisa says sure mom I love pancakes she says’.

What you should’ve written:- Lisa’s mother asked her if she and Jane wanted pancakes for breakfast. “Sure mom, I love pancakes,” She said. (Note the use of correct punctuation, and that Lisa says has been said twice in your written concept.)

You certainly did improve gradually throughout the chapter but don’t worry, with some effort, you’ll definitely improve your grammar even more. Good luck!

COMMUNICATION WITH READERs: - 2.5/5

I thought that you communicated with your in an average manner. True, you had replied to all the comments which were nice and complimented you, but you should have also replied to the comments with the critiques as well. I noticed that after the first few chapters, you started replying to them as well, so that’s good. Well then, keep communicating with the reader in an efficient manner, as the readers engagement is very important. 

GENERAL SATISFACTION: - 11/15            

I liked reading your stories, but they just felt like normal incidents where the usual daily routine goes on. Try to add some twists and turns, and maybe some more exciting incidents where the reader will be filled with more emotions such as anger, sadness, happiness, etc. If you try to perform the unusual and write more unique pieces with unexpected incidents, your book would attract more readers and it will turn more interesting. Anyways, the book was still very good, and I’ve got to say, keep it up! You will definitely improve more.

TOTAL: - 50.5/80

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