BOOK TITLE: Hell at first (and last) sight.

REVIEWER: picklejuice100

AUTHOR: Anga_Boba_Tea

GENRE: Fantasy.

COVER (5/10):

The cover is not appealing to the readers. The background picture matches with the story, but the text of the title looks very chaotic. Maybe, if you remove the back strips on the text, it might look better. And, the font of the text can be done better, too.  I suggest that you take some help from the cover shops to get a better cover.

TITLE (6/10):

Your title seems a bit too long. Moreover, I think that the bracket seems unnecessary. It will be good if you just remove the brackets. On the plus side, the title is unique and very original.

BLURB (9/10):

In my opinion, your blurb is quite cleverly written with the right amount of vagueness and introduction. The sentence structure is good, too. Although, I suggest that you should get rid of the ellipsis after ‘can’t’ and instead use a period.

PAGE LAYOUT (9/10):

The only thing I noticed here was the missing asterisks in some of the chapter parts where you skipped the time. For example; there was a scene with Benedict and Satan, where at one point they were talking about miniature golf, and by the next paragraph, there was a time skip. So, whenever a scene is transition is done, don’t forget the use of bullets or asterisks, or anything that denotes the time skip.
But, other than that, there were no messy parts.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT (7/10):

Your character’s personality did shine through the chapters. I really liked the conversations between Ben and Austin. But, for some reason, their personality was not strong, enough, if you know what I mean. I just think that they need to be more consistent, and described better. For starters, I have no idea how Austin looks like. Other than that, her inner feelings were not described, therefore, she felt distant. Moreover, head-hopping between the chapters was another reason that made it difficult to connect with them.

For example; there was a scene in chapter 3 when Ben broke into her house to give her the gift. The first part of that chapter started from Austin’s POV, and after giving her the gift, it suddenly changed into Ben’s POV. Changing POVs can be very confusing to the readers, so I suggest sticking to one POV per chapter.

GRAMMAR/VOCABULARY/SPELLING (10/10):

Girl, you aced this part. Firstly, I love your writing style. It is a perfect match with the genre, plus its flow is smooth. Added to that, your word usage/vocabulary is perfect and very easy to understand. The grammar is spot on. I just spotted maybe one or two very silly punctuation errors which can be easily fixed, but other than that every aspect was correct. Talking about the spelling, I didn’t find any errors. So, kudos!

COMMUNICATION (4/5):

I spotted a few unanswered questions in the comments, but for most of the part, there was communication between the author and the readers.

GENERAL SATISFACTION (14/15):

Regardless to say, I thoroughly enjoyed the parts I have read. The ‘magic’ system was intriguing, the writing style was very good, and I was surprised to see that the information was very swiftly delivered to the readers without info-dumping. I just think that your descriptions need a little bit of work. Other than that, it was quite a pleasure to read your book.
 

TOTAL- 64/80

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