BOOK TITLE : SHS.

REVIEWER: SamEl145

AUTHOR: _Baby_A_A_

GENRE: Romance.

COVER: 7/10

I liked the cover! You showed almost everything. But the only thing that didn’t fit with me was there was only one girl. You are writing about three girls so I suggest you should show three. But it is your wish though.

TITLE: 10/10

The title was great in my opinion as I haven’t come across such a title. It was short and understandable. You clearly conveyed what you wanted. So good job!

BLURB: 9/10

The blurb was good enough to show readers what they want. To say the truth, your story really got my attention through your blurb. I was going to through which book to review first as I have some left and when I came across yours I really got hooked. You did a very good job with the blurb. But I would suggest you to put their names too. You only wrote girls—which is okay—but it would be great if you add their names too.

PAGE LAYOUT [Paragraph, space, lines, Order of sequence, Neatness]: 8/10

The paragraphs are perfectly distributed—minus those areas where you have added someone else’s dialogue. When a particular person speaks it should be in a new paragraph. And when you have next person in cue change it into another or it feels that the same person is speaking. You can take example of the second chapter where Shaelynn grumbles about staying a home. You have put Josephine’s greeting in there too.

So I suggest you to change there. Neatness was spot on! I liked the way you wrote the title and the chapter name. It was interesting and to be honest it hooked me.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: 8/10

The characters were pretty interesting. The three girls had well distinguished. I could make out a person’s nature just by reading the dialogues. For example, you can take Shaelynn. You showed her character with confident one. It really fitted her and made her more interesting to me. How she uses the ‘F’ word every time and how savage she is.

About Halsa, she was not that confident like Shaelynn but was the oldest one and not to miss the wiset one too—as she is a hacker. Though I found her the cutest among the three when you mentioned about her fear of talking to boys. But it was weird that one moment she was shy to talk to boys and the very next moment she was so confident. It just didn’t seem to fit with me.

About Josephine, I couldn’t understand her much. She is still a mystery to me. However, from the chapters I read I think you did a good job with her too.

GRAMMAR/VOCABULARY/SPELLING: 8/10

Till the chapters I read, I didn’t find any mistakes. But when you write a dialogue, a comma should come instead of a full stop at some places. Not all but.

For example in chapter 2, “Well, it’s about your next mission… about your target,” Simon said.

And when you use a comma then make sure that the next word should be written in small letters—names are an exception. Make sure to change that.

Other than that, your vocabulary is fantastic. You used various words to describe the scenes or a particular place which I loved. Your descriptive writing is what I need to learn from you. [Just kidding!]

COMMUNICATION WITH THE READERS: 5/5

I saw how you interacted with your readers and that is an excellent thing. You replied to each comment. Interacting with readers would encourage them to read and vote your story more. So keep going with that.

GENERAL SATISFACTION: 13/15

So, I loved the story till how much I read. The story was pretty much in flow and the characters are for die to. I really loved Halsa’s character. I can relate to her much so… I liked how you showed her pairing with Brax but I felt it was too fast for them to kiss. It was the first time they met but that can be overlooked as Brax is a gangster.

However, I loved the flow of your story. It is a fast paced one which I probably prefer most of the time. I felt your book cliché at times, after reading that—leaving the ‘SHS’ graffiti behind—which is seen in most of the movies. But I loved the way you show how strong girls can be, like Josephine and Shaelynn.

Overall, your story was good and interesting though I felt a little cliché. But your story was unique in your own ways which is I appreciate.

TOTAL: 68/80

THANK YOU FOR SUBMITTING YOUR WORK FOR REVIEW AT TSC. WE WISH YOUR BOOK GREAT SUCCESS- TSC.