BOOK TITLE : Ryder.

REVIEWER: SamEl145

AUTHOR: charlottemallory / Charlotte Allen.

GENRE: Romance

COVER: 10/10

I loved the cover! The cover was spot on. It goes with plot perfectly as Ryder is a boxer. I also loved the quotes that you had on the cover. They were making the cover more interesting. And also you had added you name/username in the cover which many don’t. So Kudos to you!

BOOK TITLE: 8/10

The title was good and different. It was short and understandable. It shows that what you wanted to convey through title because Ryder is your main protagonist.

BLURB: 8/10

The blurb was good enough to show readers what they want. But it confused at some point about Andrew. However, you told readers enough of the plot and so it makes interesting. But I hope you didn’t show the entire plot in the blurb itself. I expect you to have twist and turns in the story so that it keeps the reader hooked.

PAGE LAYOUT [Paragraph, space, lines, Order of sequence, Neatness]: 9 /10

The paragraphs are perfectly distributed. The dialogues and spacing is well done. Neatness was spot on! I have cut the 1 mark because you have highlighted the name in every chapter in the start. I think that it is not needed to do that.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: 7/10

The character development was kind of balanced. I liked how you showed Julie who was trying to keep her brother Jeremy’s dream though she had a crush on Ryder. But there was only one problem.

When you write the heading as Julie then it should revolve around her. The first chapter was not much about her. It was not in a flow.

Regarding Ryder, he was a mystery. I wondered what took Ryder to take three years of rest because that’s a long time. I am sure that he had some past and that’s why he is in need of money. His character is one I loved the most.

On the other hand, I felt Andrew a bit weird. At one time he is strict but he changed drastically when Ryder came. Though many people are like this when they see a celebrity person. I would like to know more about him.

GRAMMAR/VOCABULARY/SPELLING: 9/10

Till the chapters I read, I didn’t find any mistakes. It was well edited and the structure was properly done. Regarding your vocabulary, it was pretty much good. No, it was impressive to say. You didn’t repeat the same words and used different words which was a good thing to say.

COMMUNICATION WITH THE READERS: 5/5

I saw how you interacted with your readers and that is an excellent thing. You replied to each comment. Interacting with readers would encourage them to read and vote your story more. So keep going with that.

GENERAL SATISFACTION: 13/15

So, I loved the story till how much I read. The story was pretty much in flow and the characters are for die to. As mentioned above I loved Ryder’s character. Especially his name. When his first name is Joey which is some childish name and his second name, Ryder is a badass one. I liked mysterious characters and Ryder is one of them. Julie is also one of my favorites.

I didn’t like how you highlighted every first word in the chapter. I don’t think that it is necessary to do so. Another thing was the name that you had written above, which meant that, that chapter revolved around that character, though I felt it was unnecessary. Because if you had written their POV’s then it would hold some meaning.

But you had written it third POV. But that’s okay because it was your choice.
However, I loved the aesthetics and the banner you made. You had made the banner for each chapter which was impressive. Keep that going because it attracts more readers.

Overall, your story was good and interesting though I felt a little cliché. But your story was unique in your own ways which is appreciate able.

TOTAL: 69/80

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