╭⋟───────────────╮
Unfair Life
╰───────────────⋞╯

Author :: tae_is_ma_brother

Reviewer :: chemicalkrackel

First Impression :: 0/20

It wasn't pleasant. I wasn't impressed, neither did it get me into the feels. It was a mediocre presentation and could have been laid out better.

The cover isn't the best one; its fonts with non matching color coding and images with poor blending, that's what the disaster of a piece it was. Get a designer or order at a graphic store, that'll help, but remember to order at a good store that gives refined and classed results.

The title isn't what you call a book title, it just makes me realize how fucked up life is and how fucked up it's gonna get. I advise you to change it because it's a major turn down and reminds me of a complaining damsel in distress. All I wanna do is go to that person and say a few lines of encouragement that we're all going through shit. I don't feel like reading a book with such a title.

Beginning of a new start :: 1/10

A used setting of a princess movie or a Disney princely starrer, a mother with a pretty lullaby and a kid with a heart of love, and the prologue setting up with scenery of assault.

What ruins it is the style, I have no problem with what topic it deals with but it would have looked a lot better if it was laid out better and concluded and planned on a good minute because to me it seems like drafts that need improvisings.

Concept and plot :: 2/25

The concept was good but the plot could've been a lot better.

It's an old trope and really overused, people trying to save each other, but do we realize that it isn't in our hands to save anyone because it's the person in catastrophe who needs to realize the need to get help and use it.

It could've been better, the planning of a stronger woman and a better emphasizing of it.

Characters and emotions :: 1/15

I can't feel the emotional build up you want to develop with the reader and book and it's a major thumbs down.

Building a reader's character emotional wall is important and your book has a fragile concept that's sensitive so I prefer you have a revamp of your writing tone.

Tone and style :: 1/10

It's mediocre and I don't think it's enough because to me it feels real hollow when it comes to conception and relatives.

Grammar :: 5/20

An okay approach has been made but I suggest you get wide with it and try to progress with more words and better functioning of what you want to put up.

Overall :: Please focus on the points mentioned and it will run smoothly and improvises will make it better.

Total :: 10/100