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Sour Candy
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Author :: wineisredder

Reviewer :: gukkeun

First Impression :: 18/20

» Cover :: 4/10

It's very simple. Merely a picture with words plastered across them. If I'm being honest, I preferred the last cover. It had its own flaws as well but the designs were indeed more attractive. But of course, this one isn't horrible to the point of decreasing the amount of attention given from Wattpad's passer-by. The simplicity of the current cover is aesthetic to one's eye. There is a main flaw; the author's username isn't visible. Reposition it or increase the border of the font. The fonts are the definition of simplicity, but they don't compliment the aura it's trying to emit. The cover overall conforms to the story's mood; a relaxed and light-hearted plot. Does it match the plot? Yes. Is it the best at pulling in one's attention? That, is the weakness. And it's up to you to decide whether you'd like to stick to it or throw in a better cover.

» Title :: 4/5

Charming. I couldn't find the relevance to the story. Most likely because it's a sequel. Do change the title to something that would suit the plot better if you could find one that is at the same level of aestheticism as this one. The relevance matters. Fairly speaking, sticking to it is an option. What else can I add? I love it. Stands out among the rest very well. There's nothing else for me to say.

» Blurb :: 5/5

Simple like the cover. It summarises the story as a whole. As the plot itself was pleasant and uncomplicated, I dare say the description's length and exposure of the storyline is fitting. Even if it doesn't own a specific "wow" factor or detailed and emotional dialogues between the mains, it's more than enough to have the audience visualize the idea you're throwing out. That itself, is intriguing.

Beginning of a new start :: 9/10

Simple, no unnecessary information, cute interaction between Jisoo and Lisa, great grammar, detailed writing style, uncomplicated starter. Ma'am, you simply own this batch. This was my first time reading a GxG fanfic and the starting chapters already had me intrigued. You left me a good impression and gave me hope in humanity. See how dramatic I'm being? One mark down for there were minor grammar errors. Will be explained in detailed below.

Concept & plot :: 22/25

The smooth pacing had me going the entire way. I love it. I love this plot. I'm a sucker for angst and yours—from what I've read so far—is uneventful in an incredibly good manner. A good ole classic romance with no additional scenes and exaggerated content. It's very realistic, I can see it happening. In fact, despite being a story with a very obvious aim—perhaps the ending as well—I couldn't stop reading. It's addictive. Your book is addictive. Though without events, it'll be too predictable. Add a plot twist, something mind-blowing. Keep up with the relaxed pace and just let an eagle swoop in and grab the hearts of the unsuspecting. Reward the readers with fluff or torture them with angst till the very end. Mix and match your ideas in any way you like!  

Characters & emotions :: 15/15

How you managed to make both the mains so likable, I don't even know. Jisoo is adorable and how hard Lisa tries to get her attention is admirable. Most of the one sided love fanfics I had read in the past contained the same plotline over and over. One just deeply in love and the other clueless or straight, only they realised their love all too quickly. Jisoo just falls for Lisa little by little. And it's commendable of you to not make her realize at the very first glance that Lisa is "the one" when she's "straight". The emotions? Delivered splendidly. Described every emotion of the characters wonderfully. Very well done.

Tone & style :: 9/10

Your writing style is mesmerising, but do reduce on the details. I understood every scene incredibly well though it did get wordy and a mouthful to read from time to time. I wouldn't say they were overly detailed, but some information could be laid out in just a few words without a need for additional explanation. Other than that, your writing style is what dragged me into digging deeper into the story. Length of each chapter is short yet… satisfactory? I read five chapters in one go without realising it. You really did have me. 

Grammar :: 18.5/20

Your grammar knowledge is very clearly above average. The book is very well edited. The mistakes I could find were most likely accidental. The main errors were dialogue tags and the punctuation used before ending the quotations since it keeps varying between commas and full stops. Keep in mind. Use commas for verbal tags and full stops for action tags. Also, the switching of tenses. You'd use present tense in one paragraph and the past in the other. Keep an eye out for the POVs as well. I located paragraphs in Jisoo/Lisa's chapters where they referred to themselves as "her" instead of in first person. Avoid making negligent mistakes.

Extra note :: Overall, this book is something I would hold on to all day long while sipping a cup of cocoa. Not my type of plot yet I'm pulled at the very first glance into the story. Very well done!

Total :: 86.5/100