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Cheaters
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Author :: _kimtaejoon

Reviewer :: kimvante_

First impression :: 10/20

The cover was simple. There was no editing done in it and simply the title and author's name was placed. Most importantly, why is Yoongi not involved in the cover considering he's the main lead too? I will actually talk about this matter later in the review. 

The title was good. It was relevant to the story, simple and straight to the point. Since the overall story revolves around the idea of cheating, "cheaters" gave off the right vibe. 

The blurb was eye-catching. I liked how you were unique while writing the blurb. It was packed with mystery and contained intriguing sentences. I was instantly pulled to the story the moment I read the blurb. Even if it was long, it wasn't boring to read. 

Beginning of a new start :: 6/10

The onset chapters were fast paced in my opinion. The fact that you kept changing each chapter to past and present was very confusing. We readers have a tendency to read one chapter after the other to keep the story connected but it is impossible if the POV keeps changing each chapter. It would've been better if there was a sequence to the changes, example three present chapters and then one past chapter. This way it wouldn't be so confusing and it wouldn't mix the past and present events. 

Concept & Plot :: 13/25

The concept was hands down, unique. It had zero cliché aspects nor the same old alpha/mafia/vampire stuff. It was refreshing to read such a different concept which was relatable to today's world. Almost non-fiction. I was intrigued by the concept, it's build up and most importantly, the accuracy of the situation in today's generation. Good work!

For the plot, great build up of events and situations. The cheating part was cliché but that's what the concept is focused on so not bad. However, one thing that I felt offended about, and I also hate to say this, but, where is taekook? This story of yours claims that it's a taekook book but all the focus is on Yoongi and Tae. How is it a taekook book then? Even in the cover, you've not added Yoongi despite him being a main lead, why? I don't want to say this but is this some strategy of yours to lure readers in by claiming it's a taekook book? When in fact, all focus is on Tae and Yoongi. This book will clearly be seen as a Taegi book. Because 10+ chapters in and Jungkook has NO role in the story. I mean, he's a part of the unit the book focuses on; Taekook. Yet he only appears in the story when he comes back from his job to spend time with Tae. And then he disappears again. No offence, but, what the heck? There's absolutely ZERO interactions between taekook. Very little scenes they got with each other. And well, no plot where Jungkook plays an important role.

As much as the concept is interesting, the plot is the opposite. That too only because of one negative aspect; in a Taekook book, all we see is Taegi. 

My suggestion to you would be to either change this book cover and unit to Taegi. Or change the plot, as in instead of Tae cheating with Yoongi, make him cheat with Jungkook instead even though he will be dead because this way, the focus will be more on Taekook as you state the book to be and no one will accuse you in the future.

You must be thinking I haven't thought about what if Jungkook has an important role later in the book? Well, trust me, I did focus on that but trust me on this too then, no reader will continue reading your book this long if they don't find much of Jungkook in the starting chapters. I hope you know that's how some taekook readers are, including me, I won't lie. Only a few (me too) will focus more on the concept and wait for the next chapters. But those who don't see Taekook and instead see Taegi that too Tae cheating on Jungkook in a taekook book itself (lol sorry but i can imagine the hate you'll receive when more people read your book), those people will immediately leave the book and won't read it nor recommend it to anyone. 

I want you to know that I have absolutely no dislike towards the plot or how there is no Taekook. But I have seen enough drama to know that many readers won't like this. They will accuse you of trying to lure readers in claiming it's a taekook book and bash you. Immature, I know, but I'm suggesting this only to save you from the future readers. The rest is your choice.

Characters & Emotions :: 9/15

Whenever I read a story, I focus more on the character build-up and their sentiments. Your way of portraying the characters' feelings was dense. I could only read Taehyung's emotions towards the entire ordeal. His feelings too lacked that particular emotion. It looked monotonous to me. They were plain and not thoroughly described. It gave me a feeling as if he's a robot and not a human. Sure he was taking into consideration Jungkook's feelings but it seemed like he was doing it only because it's his "responsibility", which is not. When someone cheats, the guilt should come from the heart. Not just because Jungkook was his husband and he was bound to him. No, it should be because Jungkook is first a human too. To me, it seemed like Taehyung's emotions were unjustifiable towards both his husband Jungkook and Yoongi. Everything just felt emotionless. 

The characters were good. I liked them. They were different, they were strong, bold and independent. Completely opposite from those weak characters we see in many cliché books. Each character had their own unique personality and weren't dependent on something or someone. They had their own freedom to do anything (example how despite being married, Tae and Jungkook work in different states to do their jobs) and they were fierce.

Tone & Style :: 6/10

Your writing style was good. But the paragraphs were too long. Sometimes while reading, many sentences overlapped each other and it was hard for me to understand each sentence. Having long paragraphs is actually a negative aspect because many readers get bored and might skip important paragraphs. So, it's good to have short paragraphs, preferably 6-7 lines in each. This way, your writing will look neat. The transitions from one scene to another was slightly disrupted due to the factor that POV's kept changing in each chapter. However, the descriptive writing brought more life to the story.

As I had mentioned earlier, the toning of the story was fast paced. And having long paragraphs was an obstacle while reading and understanding each sentence.

Grammar :: 17/20

Not many mistakes were located in this field. Your grammar and vocabulary was crystal clear and each sentence was well noted. As I mentioned above, I liked your descriptive writing style the most. Even the usage of complex words added more depth to the story. Absence of colons and semicolons was detected in a few areas. Spelling mistakes were also located. 

I hope my judgement was fair enough. :)

TOTAL = 62/100.