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Reviewed by: mikrokosmostae
Book Title: Behind Your Walls
Author's Name: tale_a_grammer

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(This is an opinion of an individual, which may not coincide with the masses. The individual's taste, thinking, and way of perception will definitely be different)

Cover: 8/10!

I feel that your cover doesn't coincide with your title or your blurb. A teen fiction cover seems to be way too erotic in that sense. And the story is more than that of a physical relationship between the leads.

Title: 10/10!

Apt and convincing! I can totally correlate it with your blurb! As I read through the chapters, the title seemed as if it was made for this story.

Blurb/Description: 8/10!

It May give out some red flags of being a cliché, but how you adapt it to not sound like it, that's the major task. A small suggestion – don't put up the arrival of 'another boy'. Let it be an element of surprise in your story so that he is actually introduced, it will create a more dramatic effect.

Creativity and originality: 8/10!

The premise may seem to be a little cliché, (especially Carter's pull towards Amaya and the whole bad boy concept). In reality, this same premise has been used and reused a lot of times and what readers look for is the 'fresh' aspect in that same premise. I hope you do succeed in giving that to your readers.

Plot and Flow: 18/20!

The plot and the incidents – yes all seem to be like something I have already read before. I like how there is consistency in your plot and the flow makes it much easier to read. I find myself gliding through the chapters. But as I mentioned earlier, every cliché idea or premise has a make or break point, a point that is different from every other story out there.

The backstories do make the plot a little dramatic and it pulls in the readers. I also like your titles to all your chapters – they speak volumes. (not talking about the simple ones but boy with scars, teenagers in a dream, where the roads take us – sound very aesthetic to me)

Another thing I like about your story is the exploration of a character's mind, their emotions – in this case, it is Carter. Amaya knows zilch about him and she is finding it out, step by step with us.

Also, I really really hate it when authors put up important things or 'reminders' in their author's note. Someone gave away their book's goal in the author's note! There is no need to 'mention' a foreshadowing part or anything. The readers WILL HAVE TO DISCOVER it themselves. You putting it out will leave no sense of mystery to them – they now know there will be a life or death situation ahead. A good reader will sense when there is foreshadowing – or anything as a matter of fact.

Character Development: 9/10!

The characters are perfectly stitched up with flaws. They make mistakes but are ready to own them up and rectify them. Amaya is strong – in the quiet sense. She can take care of herself and is slowly getting used to Carter – the not-so-bad boy. Carter seems to be a little reserved but is opening up, willing to sacrifice 'anything' for Amaya. He is strong too, he is emotional and he doesn't shy away from asking what he needs. He kept on and on with Amaya until she gave a nod to him. Stephen is a good friend.

Writing style, Grammar, spellings, etc.: 9/10!

Your writing is simplistic yet powerful. There are no complex sentences yet the emotions you're trying to evoke come from your narrations and descriptions. Everything is just so vivid that I enjoyed reading it in one go.

There were a few things I noticed – you wrote three different spelling for Johnson, a word or two were missing. Proofread multiple times before posting :)

Genre relevance: 10/10!

Definitely teen fiction! We are slowly riding towards the romance part – and I can't wait for the drama to kick in!

Reader enjoyment and Communication with the readers: 9/10!

I thoroughly enjoyed it! It was an emotional ride and I am looking forward to the 'foreshadowing' part.

Overall: 89/100

It is a good read for people who live for the simplistic yet powerful depiction of emotions in the first person viewpoint.