Reviewed by: ChristineAcedon

Book Title: Fractured

Author's Name: rayjaysuckaa

Cover: 7/10

Your cover is a bit simple and flat. I like the heart with the bandages on it as the centerpiece, but I also don't feel that the font style and color for the title fit as well as they could with the cover. It's an alright cover, but I think there could be a bit more detail added to really make it stand out.

Title: 10/10

I think that the title perfectly portrays the broken parts of your main characters, hinting toward a more melancholy, darker backstory for your leads.

Blurb/Description: 8/10

I like the contrast you offer in describing your two characters; and how they handle problems and confrontation. I would like a little bit more of an introduction to the two: Who are they? What are they struggling with? What's the setting/where are they at? What are their goals and desires and what do they stand to lose?

Creativity and originality: 10/10

You managed to pull together a story about two broken people in a unique and interesting way. The way the two had already met prior to the start of the story was a factor that I liked. They've seen each other, and they've formed opinions of one another prior to finding out they had a connection. It all comes together nicely and your creativity and originality shine through.

Plot and Flow: 20/20

First of all, I just want to say that I absolutely loved your first chapter. It drew me in from the beginning. Every chapter afterward has been just as interesting and easy to fall into. I found myself sneaking chapters in at work so that I could see what was going to happen next between Cassius and Quinn.

I love that you don't rush things, and you make it make sense. You offer details here and there to add depth and it all flows together very well.

Character Development: 20/20

Quinn is my absolute favorite person ever. Everything about her personality and how she handles situations (healthy or not) is amazing. You do a very good job of showing who your characters are through a mix of actions, thoughts and interactions. They seem real and relatable.

You give out their backstory naturally, without force-feeding it to your readers all at once. As we find out more and more about Quinn and Cassius, it's done in a way that we don't feel overloaded.

Writing style: 10/10

The way you split your chapters between your two main characters is clear and concise and it keeps it interesting. I want to say that I like Quinn's perspective more, but honestly, it's a very close call between the two of them. You manage to keep things descriptive and interesting. I really enjoy how their worlds seem to intertwine from the start.

Grammar, spellings, etc.: 10/10

Excellent editing. Your work has been thoroughly edited.

Overall: 95/100

I want to be able to give you some sort of constructive feedback, but honestly, I love the story and how well you've put it together. The only areas you could potentially improve, in my opinion, are the description/blurb as well as the book cover. You keep it interesting and easy to get lost in. There wasn't a boring moment throughout. I'd love to read more of your work in the future!

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