Author: Ibeart

Title: The Singing Sun

Genre: general fiction? (More on that later)

Mature: themes of abuse and violence, but I didn't find it particularly mature.

Cover and Title: 2/5
I'd have given a 4 for the title. It's very pretty and interesting, however it took a bit long for me to understand it.
As for the cover, that's where you lost some major points. The image might have been decent, but I had a very hard time telling what it was. But I found the color extremely unappealing. Judging a book by its cover, I don't think I'd have picked up yours.

Blurb: 5/5
I really liked the first line.
"Can you see my smile? Because I sure can't."
I know it's something like that, but I apologize if I wrote it incorrectly. I loved this line so much, I thought it deserved to be shared.

First Impressions: 1.5/5
You switched tenses a few times very early on, which generally sets a red flag for me. I had a very hard time getting into this story. I couldn't tell where it was going, and being totally honest, I probably would have put it down if it hadn't been for the review. That being said, I'm glad i hadn't or I would have missed out on the bits that were very good.
Also, I'd prefer the chapters titles to change more. I wasn't a fan of "Mun 1" turning to "Mun 2" etc. I wish you'd come up with different titles for all of them.

Characters: 3/5
I really liked Piyo (I know that's spelled wrong and I apologize).
Your character names are very unique! However I felt that although they were unique to other stories, they became too similar within your story. So many names were only one syllable and a good deal of them had three letters. I'd have liked some more variety.
As for the characters themselves, I liked your MC's narration. The snarky bits were my favorite. Some of the development seemed off, though. At times a character would do one thing that I previously would be unable to see them doing, without the required build up to bring them to that point.

Grammar: 2/5
Tenses changed very often. Also, even in first person direct, in the moment, character thoughts need to be in italics.
Some of your use of italics and bold text confused me. I think you went overboard with the italics, especially when I couldn't figure out what they were indicating.

Plot: 3/5
First, I need to say that you have this story in the wrong genre.
The way I see it, General Fiction could be replaced by Realistic Fiction. This means things that could actually happen.
Based on the blurb, I was wondering if this would be better labeled as fantasy. After reading a few chapters, I was proven correct. Although the scene where your MC summons flames to boils some bugs is very cool, that's clearly fantasy. The only reason I could see this as general fiction is if I was completely misunderstanding the scenes where your MC seemed to use powers, in which case, that's a different problem all together.
That being said, the plot was interesting. It just took too long to get too it.

Overall: 2.75/5 or 16.5/30
It needs to be said that I see a lot of potential here. There's all the hints of a wonderful story. You just need to put In some work to clean it up.