Author: LaniNKS2018

Title: The Queen of the Prey

Genre: werewolf

Mature: not really

Cover and Title: 2.5/5
The cover wasn't terrible but the smoke made it nearly impossible to make out any distinct images, and I want to be able to read the title on the cover.

The title is a mouthful. It's just too long. I suggest shortening it to something like 'Queen of Prey' or 'Prey Queen'.

Blurb: 2/5
It was way too long as well. No one has the patience to read a blurb that long. And I've said it before, but I'll say it again: if your blurb contains loads of grammatical errors, there is next to no chance I'll actually try to pick through a story that's sure to be full of them.

First Impressions: 2.25/5
Starting with a dream is pretty cliché. So is starting with the MC's birthday.

I like werewolf mythology, but one thing I never liked was the inner wolf being a completely different personality. It's a trope I've never been fond of.

Characters: 2/5
Ana needed to woman up! Maybe she does in the later chapters, seeing as I was only asked to read ten. But when it came down to it, I was siding with her father. If someone hurt me and my people that badly, I'd not hesitate to kill them. I want to see her stand up for herself and take action. Peace isn't always a possible answer and she'll lose more if she doesn't learn to fight back.

Rica was amusing though.

Grammar: 2/5
There were loads of typos. Almost every other sentence has some issue, be it spelling or punctuation.

Plot: 3.5/5
Not bad overall. The king's army was interesting. I would have liked to see more of that premise and pack dynamic before Ana went rogue.

Overall: 2.375/5 or 14.25/30
Don't give up! Almost halfway there and I see potential for greatness. Obviously lots of readers adore your work and they're well deserved.