Author: TiaMichelle420

Title: The Housewife

Genre: action

Mature: listed as yes, but I wouldn't particularly put it as mature.

Cover and Title: 3/5
I like it all, but it just wasn't particularly eye catching. They were just sort of meh.

Blurb: 1/5
It's so short, it doesn't peak interest at all. Rewrite and add a lot more. The blurb is what makes people want to read your story after all.

First Impressions: 2/5
It's not bad, it's just not a genre I'd be interested in. It took a long time to get into the story and I probably would have stopped had it not been for the review.

Characters: 3/5
The characters were very good and unique. The problem was that there were too many characters that they became muddled. I recommend eliminate or combine a few minor characters so that the major characters can really shine because they deserve it.

Grammar: 4/5
My only recommendations is to be very careful of commas, especially in dialogue. Shorten some of your paragraphs so that you don't present readers with a huge wall of text. That's intimidating for those reading on phones.

Plot: 3/5
Like I said, I'm just not interested in this genre, but I think the plot was still muddled, probably because of so many characters. A good character has its own purpose that serves itself and the plot, but with so many that was difficult to maintain.

Overall: 2.6/5 or 16/30
There is potential, but it needs work. If this was harsh, keep in mind that this is only an opinion. It's clear several people adore your story and it deserves avid readers!