Author: Lxrxib

Title: Malum

Genre: fantasy/paranormal

Mature: not particularly

Cover and Title: 3.75/5
Both are gorgeous, though I'd recommend using a different font for the title as it didn't really mesh with the overall vibe of the story. My main problem with both was it took me very long into the story to figure out the significance of either.

Blurb: 2.75/5
There was nothing special about this blurb that made me want to keep reading. It wasn't that it was bad, but it didn't catch my attention. I think you gave way too much away too.

First Impressions: 4/5
Good, but I'd get rid of the authors note at the beginning. No one really reads them, and it always bugs me to have to keep scrolling through stuff before I even get to the story.

Characters: 3.5/5
I really liked Josh. His relationship with Maia was really cute. And I liked how you portrayed the sins and virtues not necessarily as polar opposites.

I did think that Josh and Maia's Kiss was out of place. There wasn't enough build up. He just ran up and kissed her. Make them be talking, vulnerable, then kiss. Let readers feel it coming in the moment.

Grammar: 2.5/5
I noticed several errors, for example, many times I wasn't capitalized. It didn't often distract from the point, but occasionally the sentence became hard to follow.

Plot: 4/5
Your premise was really good. I love the idea of the seven deadly sins. It was really cool to explore that dynamic, as well as the virtues and Satan himself.

Overall: 3.4/5 or 20.5/30
You've got loads of potential. It just needs some fine tuning.