Author: anwilson98

Title: Branded

Genre: fantasy

Mature: To some

Cover and Title: 2/4
The title is catchy but I didn't see how it connected for quite awhile.

The cover is all too plain for my taste. It was just a little generic. I know an exceptional cover artist if you're interested in having someone else their  hand at it. I never make my own covers!

Blurb: 2/5
It's hard for me to give a much higher score for a blurb with typos. This is because the blurb is the first thing anyone sees and if there is typos there it will lead them to believe you book will be riddled with grammatical errors. I don't think you should have revealed Gabriel's double name information in the blurb because it gives to much away.

First Impressions: 4/5
I adored the first two sentences. The one that went something like "if the bar was a red target, he was the bullseye" wowed me. Great job!

Characters: 3/5
I wasn't particularly a fan of the names—they were simply too basic—but I like the characters. Ella was very amusing.

However, there were way too many characters introduced within a short amount of time to keep track of them all. I can't remember anything distinguishing besides Ella and a couple others, not because they weren't interesting, but from Ruth to Silas, I got confused who was who.

Grammar: 1/5
I was able to understand everything, but there were many, many errors. From commas to entirely omitted words.

For example, when a character addresses another in dialogue, you must use a comma. "Ruth, this is..."

Also, it is imperative to start a new paragraph whenever a different character speaks. I noticed a number of times Ella and Ruth both spoke in the same paragraph, which is incorrect. The grammar was by far this Stories biggest problem.

Plot: 4/5
I'm going to enjoy anything involving Lucifer. The premise was very interesting. It's just a pity that it's muddled with poor grammar.

Overall: 2.66/5 or 16/30