TITLE: Capsize
LOVE INTEREST: Archie Andrews
AUTHOR: -haydenromero

GRAMMAR: 4
CHARACTER: 4
OVERALL BOOK: 4

COMMENTS:

I love how your prologue addresses her friendship with Cheryl and Jason as well as her crush on Archie. I love how in the prologue I can tell that Archie will be upset over Mar leaving town (i'm so emo from the prologue oml). Mar's friendship with Veronica before moving to Riverdale is great as well as Cheryl's! It's so cool to see how Mar is different from Cheryl and not the typical b!tch I see in fanfictions lol. Keep up the good work, can't wait to see her see Archie again!!!

I think your Mariah is perfectly fine as an OC and it's too early to tell with her relationship with Archie– besides the fact that there's tension between them. Also, I wouldn't necessarily say your grammar was bad but I feel like you could add so much more detail into your writing! You rarely describe your character :) Other than that I love it !

REVIEW BY: sinfuldarling