TITLE: Prey
LOVE INTEREST: Archie Andrews
AUTHOR: starkwalker

GRAMMAR: 5
CHARACTER: 5
OVERALL BOOK: 5

COMMENTS:
First of all, let me just start by saying that I really loved reading this so far. It's really great — the writing's great, the character's relatable and there is just the right amount of mystery surrounding Willa. I am actually excited to read a future chapter in which you explore what went down with Jason and Willa. Also, I loved that you made Jughead and Willa good friends even though it's a little cliché these days for the main character's best friend to be Jughead.

About your OC's family, I thought it was just right. I loved the addition of twins to the family and them being compared to the Blossom twins. Cora and Bex definitely have me interested and it will be great to see how their characters tie in to the story. Alright, now moving on to your OC. I love the idea for this character and her history with Archie. I also really liked that you made your character have something in common with Archie which is music even though they both have a strained relationship at the moment. I get that Willa is not as passionate as Archie because she only took up drumming because her therapist asked her to find a hobby but nonetheless, it's a great idea!

About introducing Veronica, maybe Willa could bump into her at Pop's one day after school. Since Veronica's mother is now working there, it would make sense for her to be hanging there sometimes. Then, maybe Veronica thought that Willa looked familiar and asks if she can join her. Willa could be having a milkshake or something ahaha. And then their conversation starts and as it progresses, Veronica realises that Willa is the one they called looney tunes (she could have learned that from the gossip at school) but she is interested in Willa and finds that she likes her despite everything. I don't know what you plan for the both of them to have in common but perhaps you can make them bond because of it. Maybe something like that! I hope this helps haha. If it doesn't, you can always pm me if you need opinions!

I can't wait to see how this story goes so don't stop! I actually really love some of your other books like — Into You, River and Ruins. I will definitely recommend this to others and I can't wait for Archie and Willa to be together!

REVIEW BY: luciangemini