Book name : Pal Pal Dil Ke Paas
Author : Trial_Writer
Mature? : No
Chapters read : 15
Fandom : AnuPre
Genre : Fan Fiction

R E V I E W

➵ First impression : Nice.

➵ Cover : The picture is good, but the font style, colour & placing isn't looking appealing to eyes. There is a white line on the top, I'm not sure why it is there. Try changing the cover.

➵ Title : The story has some twists & turns as I can see because of so many characters, maybe you kept the title owing to the further chapters.

➵ Blurb : The blurb isn't much interesting, the sentence is little confusing. Change the blurb.

➵ Flow & pace : The flow & pace is going slow, don't make the story's flow very slow, some readers may lost interest from it.

➵ Plot of the book : The story has just started from here, and there's so much more to discover I assume. Till now, the plot is going simple, AnuPre's wedding is going to happen that's all I can say.

➵ Grammar : Don't write everything in one para, it's eye stressing. No emojis should be used in stories. The dialogues & happenings are written together, it was difficult to know who is speaking what & doing what.

➵ Character development : As it's just beginning I didn't felt character development, obviously. But try to show emotions.

➵ Overall impression : It's going to be a simple story, I felt like I have read this type of story before also. Go with something different in the plot.

➵ Suggestions :

- Change the cover and blurb.

- Make the pace little fast, not too much but yes little fast.

- Edit the chapters, change the style of delivering the dialouges. Remove the emojis from the chapters. Make small paras, give little description about the happenings.

- Make the dialogues & happenings clear.

- Editing is must.

- Show some emotions in the story.

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Published : 22/10/2020