Book name : Poisoned Love
Author : dishatripathi7
Mature? : Yes
Chapters read : 9
Fandom : MishBir
Genre : Fan fiction

➶ R E V I E W ➴

➵ First impression : Intriguing.

➵ Cover : Your graphic designer has done a great job! I loved the cover.

➵ Title : "Poisoned Love", I won't comment on it as the story has many secrets to cover and maybe you chose it owing to the future chapters.

➵ Blurb : The blurb is like any other book I have read, though it looks good but I don't find that "x-factor" in the characters. They are looking like poles apart personalities, I liked the line "the deeper she goes, the darker it gets". The last few lines aren't that interesting in my opinion, try working on them.

➵ Flow & pace : The flow & pace is slow, not very slow but yes a little slow. I know you want to make everyone understand the characters in depth, but I feel you are already succeeding in it.

➵ Plot of the book : No offence, the plot is a cliché. But after reading the last three chapters, I feel it's going to be interesting. Try going for some unique elements which we don't find in this cliché. 

➵ Grammar : The grammatical errors are there, a bit more. There are no full stops, commas somewhere. The dialogues need not to be bold. Make the punctuations correct. Somewhere I saw your readers were confused who is speaking which dialogue, so correct those parts. Your vocabulary is perfect!

I don't know if it's autocorrect, but you have misspelled "definitely" as "defiantly" at many places. Else, the dialogues were thought well & deep.

➵ Character development : I can't say about character development now, as the story has just started. But I can sense major character development and lots of twists & turns in the story, all the best for it.

➵ Overall impression : The first three chapters made me frown thinking it's going to be the same cliché, "A middle class employee, a rich & arrogant boss" but after a few chapters, I'm stunned by the twists & turns.

➵ Suggestions :

You're a good writer, I don't have much to say for you. But still :

- Work on punctuations & grammar, at some places the sentence formation looks vague and it confused me.

- Try to make the blurb more interesting.

- Don't make the plot a complete cliché. The plot is improving in the recent chapters, keep that spirit on.

That's all I can suggest you!

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Published : 19/10/2020