Book name: Everything Happens For A Reason
Author: -sarcasticchica-
Genre: Short Story/Chicklit
No. of chapters: 3
Mature?: No

➵ First impression: Cover - gave me typical love story vibes. Title - overused... Blurb - interesting.

➵ Cover: Although the cover looks beautiful, it doesn't suit your story. It's more like a cute love story, not for a story like yours. So I would recommend going for a cover redo.

➵ Title: It's overused and doesn't exactly suit the book.

➵ Blurb: The quotes weren't catchy enough. But those third-last and second-last paragraphs were intriguing. I would say: remove the last lines and the starting quotes and just keep the "Lili Winston..." and "For instance..." paragraphs.

➵ Plot: It's sweet and simple with a little mystery to it. However, I feel you should have spent a little more time lingering over a certain moment. And maybe if the chapters were more longer, this short story would stay with me for a little longer. You need more depth to the situation, death and coping up with it is not easy and we simply can't just move on when the person is so close to us.

➵ Character/s: Can I just say I loved Ashton's words to Lili?

i) Lili: She would be a strong and emotional girl to me. I liked the fact she wasn't judgmental about anyone, well except Valarie, even Jessica! I couldn't exactly connect to her, as the chapters were fewer and the story was fast.

ii) Ashton: Seems like a sweet and nice boyfriend/friend anyone can get. Loved how he wasn't rude to her even though Lili's word might be painful to him when she talked about Valarie.

iii) Valarie: It's so refreshing to read about a stepmother who's not evil and is just misunderstood as evil. Although I still couldn't understand her reason for blaming herself, please explain to me? (:sob:)

➵ Flow & pace: The pace is perfect for the three shots, but, I feel, you should have given the scenes a little more time and space.

➵ Grammar: I found no mistakes at all! There's still room for improvement with your vocabulary.

➵ Overall impression: It was a sweet and simple three shots for me. Sadly and unfortunately, nothing extraordinary about it.

➵ Suggestions:

- Ask for a cover redo.

- Change the title.

- Restructure your blurb.

- Give details to the scenes.