Book name : Bekhayali Mein Bhi Tera Hi Khayal Aaye
Author : Slytherinchick25
Mature? : No
Chapters read : 3
Fandom : ParIca
Genre : Short Story

R E V I E W

➵ First impression : DRAMA!!!

➵ Cover : I liked the dark shades, but when I read your story, and try to match it with the content, it doesn't suit the book. I would suggest you to ask for a redo, and go for a light themed, or little dramatic cover.

➵ Title : Well, way too long, and doesn't actually suits and tell your plot. Go for a shorter title.

➵ Blurb : Well the blurb is very short, doesn't tell anything about your plot nor your characters. It's just song lyrics, and seven sentences, which tells literally nothing! The blurb needs to be re-written. Right from the starting to ending, you need to work on it. If I was a random reader, I wouldn't get interested in the book. Maybe you can choose an attractive quote (for the beginning two lines) which tells something about your story. As the starting two lines are always important, so try your best to catch everyone's attention.

"She wanted to please her loved ones", understandable. "He did not have any loved ones", work on this line, it's not looking clear. "Both loved each other, but had no other choices", umm what's this hinting on, I got more confused (you made a confused soul, more confused, lol!). "A marriage, an accident", there are two meanings behind it. Maybe it will be like Aaryan faced an accident and Anvi will get married to another man? And the other will be the one in the book.

➵ Flow & pace : I didn't felt it rushed, but, lol, I can't help saying the story is too dramatic! Pace and flow was perfect. Though the first chapter had nearly so many things in one! Their first meet, falling in love, proposal and then suddenly wedding!?

➵ Plot of the book : Honestly, you made me cry thinking about the accident and then suddenly said it's a dream! :(((( so bad of you!!

➵ Grammar : The book needs editing. Also, in the last chapter, make the lyrics - looks like they are lyrics cause it was all messed up, I was searching where are the dialogues and descriptions amidst the lyrics.

➵ Character development : You know what I think, you could have continued with the sequence and made them live your 'happily ever after' without dream thing. I loved your characters, and they were too pure for this world! Starting right from Anvi, I found her relatable, she wanted her happiness and her family's too. Aaryan, stop making me cry already!! I liked how Nitya (my brain should stop thinking about Colgate.), supported Anvi and tried to make her fight for her. Flawed characters, I didn't found Anvi perfect nor Aaryan, and that's why they made a place in my heart. Good job in plotting them!

➵ Overall impression : This story is totally for them who comes on Wattpad to detach themselves from real life and want to dive into the book's world. Not practical though, I loved the way it progressed.

➵ Suggestions :

- Ask for a redo from your graphic designer. (In short, trouble my drinking partner!)

- Go for a shorter title.

- Blurb to be re-written.

- I guess the first chapter can be more longer and all the things can be described more properly. It was all happening all of a sudden.