Book name : HEARTBEATS - A Distant Love
Author : anuliya123
Mature? : No
Chapters read : 44
Fandom : AnuPre
Genre : Fan Fiction

➶ R E V I E W ➴

➵ First impression : Interesting.

➵ Cover : The cover don't have the book name, your name is also not there. Check out cover shops on Wattpad, or ask me to pm some good cover shops.

➵ Title : The title is good, though I'm not quite sure that it's the most apting for this book. And the subtitle "A Distant Love", also don't make much sense to me.

➵ Blurb : The blurb was interesting, like totally different! But remove emojis & correct your grammatica errors.

➵ Flow & pace : The flow & pace of the book was just perfect! I don't feel I have to correct you in this point, but when it's flashback just write the scenes in italics, so it won't create much confusion.

➵ Plot of the book : I don't usually go all aww-ed on a book, but the plot of this book! I just loved it, though it was becoming a clichè at some points but the elements you added in the book made every chapter interesting. I thoroughly enjoyed reading the book.

But you just lacked at some points, Prerna was supposed to pay the money to her landlord, and the party for which Mohini chose her wasn't shown.

➵ Character development : Loved each and every character's development. Anurag was the character which you have succeeded in explaining very well from all the characters. Prerna, Mishelle, Ali, and many more. I feel adequate amount of emotions in the book. And despite of so many characters, I feel every character was given their space.

➵ Grammar : The grammar is the main thing your book lacked, there are many grammatical errors in the whole book. Instead of ellipses you can use commas too. In the initial chapters, change the style of delivering dialouges. Also, the initials chapters can be combined to one as they are very small and can make a bigger chapter. And though the gifs and images gave a visual treat, but try not adding them as when we read published books, there are not so many images in them.

Sometimes the readers have to guess who said the dialogues, so please work on it. Moreover, don't write everything in one paragraph. Try going for little description, I'm sure it will look good.

➵ Overall impression : You are a good writer, all you have to do is check the parts where you lagged, and improve with them. The book needs major editing, if you feel it will take time, you can check editing shops on Wattpad.

➵ Suggestions :

- Cover & title should be changed.

- Blurb should be edited.

- Clear the potholes, as I mentioned in the last few lines of "plot".

- Edit the book, there are many grammatical errors.

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Published : 19/10/2020