Book name : Our Mingled Love
Author : shimmerandsummer
Mature? : Not yet
Chapters read : 22
Fandom : AnuPre/MaNan (Crossover)
Genre : Fanfiction

R E V I E W

➵ First impression : I N T E R E S T I N G!

➵ Cover : The colour scheme isn't pleasing, there is no author's name on it. Do change the cover. I liked the first cover too.

➵ Title : Perfect for the story.

➵ Blurb : The blurb is very interesting! Immediately I felt the urge to click the read button.

➵ Flow & pace : Perfect! Just perfect! This flow and pace is much needed.

➵ Plot of the book : I don't know from where to start! I freaking loved the whole plot!! I have read many stories like these, but yours felt the best! I'm abso-hecking-lutely loving the story! (I used your dialouge, xD). Everything was plotted, I didn't noticed any loophole in the story, starting from MaNan's breakup to Manik-Prerna meeting in hospital. From AnuPre's reconcile to Anurag-Nandini's meet for wedding. Everything was just perfect! I just love how you added their essence so well! MaNan being the cutest & adorable AnuPre!

➵ Grammar : Okay I know the chapters are way too much long for you to correct your grammatical errors.

I would suggest using some grammatical rectification apps. Or maybe just Google Docs.

Error :

I and Prerna.

Correction :

Prerna and I.

Other than that, I just noticed that in some chapters you used quotation marks to write thoughts, which made me confused, like was Nandini thinking or talking to herself. So try using single quotation marks ('...').

I can't suggest you proofreading as I know 4000+ words to be proof-read, difficult work! So try using grammar apps!

➵ Character development : It's going so smooth! Starting from Nandini, I feel she is childish but becomes mature when the situation demands. From agreeing for marriage to planning to back off, I just loved her! I just loved those chapters when Anurag and Manik were so close to meet, the we she reacted was so natural!

Then, Prerna. She was the only, to be true, who knew the whole fiasco. I felt her mature, but of course she is also a human and made some mistakes, which were right in her point of view. And I loved how you kept her essence like how it was in show, a crazy girl who loves to dance in rain. She defines the quote, 'Waqt ke hisaab se kaun chalta hai? Machine chalti hai. Main toh apne dil ke hisaab se chalti hu'.

Going for Manik, I felt him little rude to Prerna in beginning but that's his nature! He becomes little frustrated in situations like those! And when he was drunk, I swear tears brimmed down my cheeks!

Anurag, to be true, I was laughing in some chapters when everyone knew everything but not him. But the last two chapters made me feel guilty, his dialouges were just... heartbreaking! *hoping for AnuPre patch-up soonish*. And yes, that chapter when Manik was asking for his tee, and him being like 'when-did-I-bought-ticket-for-circus', I was laughing like anything!

➵ Overall impression : The whole book was very interesting, it kept me hooked throughout! I have read books like these, but yours captivated me very well. I seriously have no suggestions for you!

➵ Suggestions :

- Change the cover.

- Try using some grammar apps.