Book name : Eternal Love
Author : sushantian
Mature? : A little
Chapters read : 48
Fandom : SushRiti (Bollywood)
Genre : Romance

R E V I E W

➵ First impression : Mystery! I'm loving it!!

➵ Cover : Why is there a white strip on the top? I found the picture cute but the fonts were on their face and it looked suffocated. Also, seeing the mystery part of the book, I feel this cover is too bright. Do change the cover soon.

➵ Title : Though the title gives that romantic novel vibes, and it suited too, but the mystery part in the book contrasted it. Thought not completely, but maybe that mystery was more so you can try changing the title.

➵ Blurb : The blurb was nothing interesting, only the first line gives insight about the storyline, which looked like a cliché.

Tip : May we write clichés, but do make sure the blurbs are interesting.

➵ Flow & pace : The flow was little disturbed as you didn't continued most of the chapters with the same scene. Pace was smooth, but them falling in love was quick. Like even if it is love at first sight - you could have showed them as friends and falling in love later. All and all, the book kept me hooked to it completely!

➵ Plot of the book : First I thought- okay it's going to be like a normal lovey-dovey love story. But you proved me wrong. I just loved that murder mystery angle to it! But one thing tensed me- if Ankit could be shown in a chapter, like very little part of him, then readers would be more dumbstruck! Because he came all of sudden, and readers didn't even knew his name!

➵ Grammar : There were grammatical mistakes in the chapters. The descriptions were on point, but the emotions were less described. Like when Adreil was found dead, Manny could have been shown in an emotional breakdown. May he don't like her, but at least she was his sister.

➵ Character development : Aisha's character development was smooth, but at least you could have showed a scene where she slaps Ankit for whatever he did. Manny's emotions weren't there much, yes readers understood him by Aisha's POV, but his feelings were less in it.

➵ Overall impression : I was totally enjoying the mystery part and their love story too. But the chapters were very short. I would suggest edit the book and then you can even increase the chapter length.

P.S. : I edit a chapter and from 1000 words it becomes 1500 sometimes. So yes, edit properly, pour the emotions in them and you can increase the chapter length.

➵ Suggestions :

- Change the cover.

- Just ponder about the title once.

- Write a blurb soon.

- If possible, show the 'falling in love' part more properly.

- Do check the suggestion I gave in 'Plot' part.

- Try adding some more emotions in the characters. Like the way they should react at a particular moment.

- EDIT. The book needs major editing.