Book name : Venomous Love
Author : zainabil_n
Mature? : No
Chapters read : 26
Fandom : KarMan (Bollywood)
Genre : LGBTQ+

➵ First impression : Nice.

➵ Cover : The colour scheme isn't pleasing. I appreciate the efforts of your graphic designer, but the cover isn't look appealing. Order a new cover from a cover shop.

➵ Title : Venomous Love - I'm not sure about the title. Is it because Aman's parents weren't accepting them first? I don't find any reference of this title in the whole story. Moreover, emoji in title is looking childish.

➵ Blurb : The blurb was short. But you nearly told your plot. Don't do that, make it little interesting. Show how they are. Then some twists of the story.

➵ Flow & pace : It was very quick in the beginning only, love between them happened way too much quick. Write longer chapters, go for a normal pace.

➵ Plot of the book : So first I wanted to read Aman and Kartik's love story, but you ended it very quickly. Then the plot was becoming like the movie but you added your imagination to it and the whole drama was just entertaining. I was hooked to Devika part, like she will leave or not!

➵ Grammar : There are many grammatical errors in the book. I want to give you some tips for narrative and dialogue.

I see you write like this :

Weird ! , said Devika.

Go for this :

"Weird!" said Devika.

OR

"Weird," mouthed Devika.

Don't use emojis while writing, they look very unprofessional. You have written all the chapters in one para, which was very eye straining. Make paragraphs, be little descriptive. Let your readers imagine by your words. It's looking like you are just normally saying, there are no emotions intact in the story.

➵ Character development : I felt they were same throughout the whole story. And try adding their emotions, their POV felt like they are just telling something.

➵ Overall impression : It was an interesting story at the last few chapters, if you can show their love story more deeply in the starting chapters then many readers will love it.

➵ Suggestions :

- Change the cover.

- Do think about title.

- Work on the blurb.

- In my opinion, rewriting would be more better and go for a normal pace.

- If possible, show KarMan's love story more nicely and with depth.

- Change the style of writing dialogues. Pay good attention to the "Grammar" part of this review.

- Show the character's inner turmoil, it's a must!