Book name : Kuch Toh Hai Tujhse Raabta
Author : aditi902
Mature? : No
Chapter reads : 28
Fandom : DevAkshi
Genre : Fan fiction

R E V I E W

➵First impression : Confusing.

➵ Cover : Your graphic designer has done a good job.

➵ Title : I have read the whole book, but I don't feel the title is apt in any sense for the book. And moreover you have 2 subtitles, one in title and one in cover. "A musical love story", also doesn't have much role in the story and nor "Dil ki sunu ya maa ki?" have, so I guess you should remove both of them or try adding a subtitle which have some sense in the story.

➵ Blurb : The blurb looks intriguing for any DevAkshi fan, as for me too. But as I read the story, I wasn't feeling the same.

➵ Plot of the book : Honestly, I feel there isn't any plot. You said in the blurb they are childhood friends and stuff, when I read the book they were somewhere holding hands as lovers, somewhere we see Ishwari not accepting Sona. Keep the book in one way, don't add flashback and present together, there is a chapter where the family members were dancing, but I feel it's completely illogical, as you haven't written anything more in that chapter. Some chapters have only lyrics and a few scenes. The teasers made the book interesting but there was nothing like that in the book, maybe because it's still on going book that's why I'm not clear. There are many potholes too. Or maybe I failed to understand.

➵ Flow & pace : Starting with this one, the book, the flow & pace wasn't clear. At one point we see DevAkshi romance; in another chapter their confession, in some chapter their flashback as childhood friends. But I'm sorry, none of these three things made any sense when I keep them together, I've explained them in "plot".

➵ Character development : I don't feel any character development, maybe there was. But because the book sometimes says, they were childhood friends but at some point I have read Dev talking about him snatching Sona's job and doesn't Ishwari know Sona is Dev's childhood friend? I'm way too much confused with the characters, you should consider rewriting the whole book.

➵ Grammar : You have good vocabulary skills, your descriptions are perfect but when it came to describe the meet of DevAkshi, it was absurd. At some places there weren't proper quotations, I had to figure out which are the dialogues and which are their thoughts and what they are doing. So try editing the book. Moreover, you have written "Rhea" somewhere and sometimes "Riya". "Samarth" becomes "Samrath".

➵ Overall impression : The book's plot have to be thought clearly, as to what you want to deliver to your readers. Grammatical errors should be edited. I don't know why, but I feel you have added the serial's dialogues like for Natasha and all. DevAkshi's confession looks the same like of serial. At one point you said it's different from the serial, but the dialogues weren't making it feel so.

➵ Suggestions :

- Try thinking the plot once again.

- Remove the potholes.

- Edit the book once with all the potholes & grammatical errors removed.

- Add some emotions in characters, it looks like they only speak dialogues and done.

➵ Author's specification : Highlight those portions where I am not able to clearly bring out desired emotions.

- I couldn't grab where there were any emotions, as the plot confused me a lot, but I already said in "suggestion" there weren't any emotions in them.

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Published : 18/10/2020