Title: Trapped: In the Oblivion
Author: wallflower_tris
Genre: Mystery/Thriller
Status: Ongoing
Mature: No
Summary:

Life has a funny way of messing with us.

Danielle soon realizes that as she struggles with her life. Just when she thinks that things couldn't get any worse, she comes to the conclusion about how wrong she could possibly be.

With a significant part of her dark history obliterated, she tries to move on with her life only to find herself as a helpless victim fallen into the traps of her obscure past.

First impression 9.5/10 -

Cover: Your cover is absolutely stunning. It reminds me of a paperback I'd find in a book store (I don't know why). The only thing I don't like (it's where you lose the .5) is that your name on the bottom clashes with the colors in the cover. It doesn't look like it's meant to be there.

Summary: The summary is very well written. It gives enough information, but doesn't give away everything. It sparks curiosity in me and makes me want to read more.

Plot 8/10 - I absolutely can't stand your first part. I hate cast chapters. When you start a book, you want to get right into the action. You don't want to see a cast list. I like your plot though, it's very suspenseful and intriguing. The questions that are asked in the chapters makes my curiosity even greater. I also personally hate how you put the gif in one of your chapters, it seemed unprofessional.

Dialogue 8/10 - There is one big thing I noticed in your dialogue. You put a full stop after dialogue even when it's followed by "she said".

Instead of

"She deserves to know." Dylan pressed...

It should be

"She deserves to know," Dylan pressed...

It's little, but important.

Grammar 9/10 - I didn't notice any large errors, mostly just missing commas. Your dialogue score also affected this.

Characters 9/10 - Your characters are definitely well planned. They have secrets and personality and I hope to see them develop.

** Bonus Points **
I'm giving you an extra half a point because your descriptions were beautiful.

From the prologue:

However inside that unnerving hue of shadow, there streamed in a ray of faint illumination. Like a parched traveler in search of an oasis in a scorching desert, I followed the source of light with frail footsteps.

That was absolutely amazing and I thought you deserved extra for it.

Overall 9.2/10 - I can tell this is going to be an amazing story. All you need to do is fix the few small grammatical errors and you'll be set! Maybe fix that first part too if you want. That's up to you though :)

I highly recommend this book to anyone and everyone!