Nyhterides

Title/Cover: First off, your title fits really well! Heaven is the setting and fits perfectly with the religious themes you've established. It's simple and catchy, so good job on that! If I'm correct, it's a rewrite of a previous story of the same name, so I understand why "reinvented" part is there. I think it would work better in parentheses or brackets though, since I thought it was part of the title at first and it didn't quite pack the same punch. That's a nitpick though. Your cover is good too. It's a little simple, but personally I don't have a problem with that. The dark color scheme fits the book very well. Though "Heaven" pops quite nicely in yellow, the reinvented is almost illegible on my phone screen. I'm not an expert on covers, so I don't have much more to say.

Grammar: Your grammar flows really well. I saw a stray comma or two, but overall it was very easy to read, so kudos on knowing the English language!

Characters: Okay, I'm impressed. You introduced us to a lot of characters throughout the first few chapters, but you gave insight into all of them, and not once did I feel confused. From Mrs. Cullen stamping the spider in chapter one to Father Caleb's famished remarks in chapter five, I got really fantastic insight into an array of characters that go beyond colorful (seriously, I wouldn't have to complain so much about the Bella Swans of the world if I read more books like this one). And I have a feeling there's even more to come. I'm looking forward to a few juicy backstories and dramatic reveals. It seems like nothing in this town is what meets the eye.

Dialogue: Yes, they do talk like people! Your dialogue is really excellent—casual enough to flow, but somehow it fits right in with your slightly fancier writing style. The banter between Sina and Cookie was especially fun, and served its purpose of giving us insight into the two characters. Each character felt like they had their own voice as well—Mrs. Cullen blabs too much, Cookie is flirty, Father Caleb is extremely reserved, and so on.

Plot and pacing: I have zero complaints. The plot feels like it's gearing up to be something special. I love the '80s setting (I'm really '80s nostalgic for someone born in the early '00s) and the religious themes. You played really well with perspective in chapter one (I'm still mourning the little spider friend) and gave us as readers an idea of just what we're in for. Pacing feels fine—a little slow, if anything, but if it was any faster, nothing would make sense. It felt like after chapter 5 things were gearing up to take off. I'm thoroughly hooked!

Personal enjoyment: Yes. I absolutely loved this. Spooky, sleepy town where things are darker than they seem, religious hypocrisy themes, and a paranormal element? Are you kidding? This is my thing! Your grammar, plot, dialogue, EVERYTHING are so good and left me wanting more. Oh, and the soundtrack! There was nothing about this I didn't like.