I feel like I should definitely preface this with a warning: this book contains some extremely graphic nonconsensual scenes, which I did address in this review. So, if you don't want to read about me reading about such things, here's your heads-up.

@AshlynLynx

Title/Cover: Aesthetically, the cover is looks nice. The girl looks like Lillian, and the pop-up windows are very dark web-y, which fits in with Elijah's whole... thing. However, there's a major element missing from your cover: your title! No title and no byline makes seem like an image was chosen and stuck in the cover area. You definitely need to add it! Canva has some great fonts you can choose from and add easily enough. 

Grammar: Overall, your grammar is good. I saw a few sentences like this, though: "The sky dyed hues of crimson and fuchsia." This is a dependent clause because it only has a subject but no verb, so it shouldn't be on its own. Other than an abundance of semicolons, this was the only thing I really saw. 

I have a few things I'll put here that aren't strictly grammar-related but I still wanted to mention. First off, I noticed you like to say "he'd" instead of "he had". This is fine in general, but I'd advise against doing it when you're talking about something a character has in their possession (as opposed to what they have done). Just know that it does draw attention to itself. Another thing I noticed was that you stuck a lot of dollar words into the text. This tells me you probably used a thesaurus or synonym generator quite a lot (am I right in assuming that?). There's nothing with that--a thesaurus can be a writer's best friend if they know how to use it--but here you used a lot of words that just didn't fit, and this made your writing more flowery than concise rather than striking a balance between the two. For example, you used "saccharine" twice in the first chapter alone, and a few more times after that. There are several instances where simpler wording would have been more effective. Sometimes, though, it does work, and I feel like I should say now that your prose and description were very very good.

Characters: Because Elijah and Lilith spent the first few chapters doing the, er... devil's tango, the most I could surmise was that Elijah is dominant, a no-means-yes kinda guy. No morals, pretty heartless, life of crime--just the kind of character we typically love to hate (thus the title). But he's also a lot more, um, malicious than that, I felt. Lillian is on the opposite end of this spectrum. She's said to be very kind generally, but let's just say her browser history isn't so squeaky clean. So far, this is enough. I did have a bit of an issue with the way she reacted to what Elijah did to her. She went from being afraid to feeling validated by the live chat comments to being really into the nonconsensual adult time to going home after it was over and feeling worthless (more on that in the plot section). Overall, I felt like I didn't know any more than that. The dual POVs were a good thought, but very tough to keep track of because they switched so often. I think it might've worked better if you had just alternated chapters.

Dialogue: Not bad. Some of the dialogue (before it became 90% moaning) felt a bit formal, like Elijah saying "allow her passage" and "discard your dress" and "in the organization". Other than that, no complaints!

Plot and pacing: I had a big problem with the plot. To be fair, I'm not the target audience, and I tried to keep that in mind, but the subject matter still made me uncomfortable. I understand what kind of book this is. I know it's supposed to be dark and taboo and all that, but the fact that the book is about a girl who seemed to really enjoy her own rape left a bad taste in my mouth. Pacing felt quick because we jumped right into a sex scene, but also quite slow because said sex scene takes up the first four chapters. 

Personal enjoyment: Overall, not the book for me. BUT that's not to say it's not without its merits. The writing itself is very strong for the most part, and it seems like you know what you're doing. It contains the best-written rape scene I've ever read, but also one of the most graphic and uncomfortable. Again, I understand the appeal of noncon and dark romance and the like, but it's simply not for me. I think the kinds of people that enjoy the genre would love what you've written. Just because I'm not one of them doesn't mean I thought it was necessarily bad.