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Title/Cover: The title is actually perfect. I have no notes. It's honestly really clever. The cover is super cute, too, and I love the little characters. The blue font and the yellow background pop nicely (and blue and gold were my school colors so I'm partial to them). Overall, both of these work super well in my opinion. 

Grammar: Your grammar flows pretty well for the most part. I think I caught maybe one tense error and a few words that could probably be replaced with better ones (if that makes sense?), but honestly it's nothing that really affects the clarity, and the mistakes (yes, there are some) are nothing that can't be fixed by some pretty straightforward copy editing. 

Characters:  Molly is honestly really relatable, especially for me right now lol. She's definitely a lovable slob and I'm here for it. She seems to be prone to a lot of embarrassing situations, which makes for some funny chapters. Jack is harder to get a read on, but he seems like a typical tall, dark, and handsome boy. I mean, this is Wattpad, after all. He doesn't seem like a bad guy, but he's pretty chill and not (I'm assuming) the most outgoing and helpful of people. He does help Molly get home after she vomits in public, but he doesn't give her much, like, emotionally, if that makes sense? These are the only two we've spent much time with, and since your chapters seem to be on the shorter side, we don't know either of them terribly well yet, but I'm sure we'll learn more as we move forward, and meet some new people. 

Dialogue: Pretty solid! I don't really have much to say. Not much struck me as really off or bad, so I'll leave it at that. Honestly, fixing your other grammar issues will give you most of what you need here. 

Plot and pacing: The pacing does feel a liiiittle slow, which is probably because your chapters are pretty short. I read through chapter 5 or 6 and we haven't really seen any conflict–just Molly interacting with Jack. While this does make your chapters easily digestible, it also invites the risk of boring your reader if you don't manage to hook them with your characters. As for the plot, it seems very straightforward, but there are definitely a lot of questions to be answered: first and foremost, what is Jack doing at an all-girls school?! As I've said, the plot hasn't exactly started yet (unless the plot is Jack and Molly's assignment), so I don't have much to say about it. I'm excited to see what it turns into, though. It does have all the makings of a very fun read. 

Personal enjoyment: I mean it as a compliment when I say that this book is an easy read. And I don't mean that it's at, like, a second grade level. It's sort of simple in a really nice way. It's grounded, it flows pretty well, the chapters are short, the characters are fun, and it's a great lazy day book. It's almost got a sitcom feel–as in, at some points I can almost hear a laugh track. This is a great, light read and I did enjoy it for what it was. Nothing groundbreaking here (yet?), but I definitely did enjoy reading. Again, a little copy editing or a run through Grammarly will help you, but it's obviously a first draft and that's all to be expected. I think there's a little that could be trimmed to make the pacing a little quicker (or, honestly, just more happening in one chapter would help). 

That's about all I've got. Sorry for the short review, but that usually means I like what you have! Also, sorry about how long this took to write. Between life and school and phone troubles and ONC and my mental state, I've had almost nothing left for Wattpad. I've got more time now, though, so if you have any questions or want me to elaborate on anything, feel free to ask! I'm always happy to help! Hopefully you got some use out of this...