Author: XxThexFallenxAngelxX

The Review

Cover, Title and Description
The could have been a lot better. The dimensions are not right, it should be 800x512 pixels. The fonts are not fitting quite right in the cover because of it. The cover is dark, the eyes are creepy. It's not easy to understand what you are actually trying to show in the cover. Your name is just too big. Minimize it. You can visit graphic shops on Wattpad, they really come handy.

I understand the title because of the blurb. But, in my opinion, it's too long. Try to make it shorter and more catchy. Also, it's not quite relevant in the chapters you have published till now because Katerina is not quite in the picture. Try to get her in as soon as possible as she is the protagonist.

The description is so damn cool. It's written beautifully and has that spice. It got me hooked right in. It's mysterious in real sense. Good work with that.

First Chapter
The first chapter was full of information and tid bits of the family members. There were a lot of names which made me a bit confused but I caught up later on. I understood the focus of the first chapter was the introduction which was nice and the cliffhanger was really interesting.

Character Development
There were a lot of characters in the first chapter but after that you started balancing out the chapters with limited characters and refrained yourself from writing a lot of things together. I appreciate that. For now, the characters are distressed because Mikki went missing and in the latest chapter Andrew's brother also goes missing. You wrote the relations and everything really well. Nice work!

Plot Development
It's not been much chapters but the story has started moving. People are going missing, police is investigating. It's developing in full swing.

Grammar and Detailing
Grammar is nice with slight problems in articles, nothing a proof read can't take care of. Your vocabulary is nice and punctuations are also alright. You don't shift tenses either which is another plus.

Detailing was very nice. You write in a very descriptive manner. You try to describe everything starting from dialogues to settings. It's nice, though, I would suggest you to describe your characters' features a bit more. That's it.

Overall Rating
4