Author: Brind2y2

The Review
Cover, Title and Description
You should change your cover as soon as possible. It's not alluring, neither is it relevant with the story nor is the picture quality good. The fonts are not matching, your username is not visible. There are a lot of cover shops on Wattpad, you should consider checking them out.
Title is also not very attention grabbing. It's too long and just boring. Think of something creative and fitting. I know you showed the relevance of it in your story but it felt compelled. It was as if because you have chosen it as your title, you are forcibly trying to incorporate it in the story when it should be the other way around.
The very first word of the description is faulty. It's not 'Some one' but 'Someone'. And the thing is when you are saying that it's "Someone", you should use 'they' as a pronoun, not 'he'. Now coming to the basic blurb, it's too much information in a small paragraph, too much confusion. You used so many names that anyone will be confused. In a blurb, you should limit the amount of information. Just write about Radhika and Arjun and what mess they got. You don't have to write so many things. One more thing, never ever write "Find out the truth by reading this story". Personally, as a reader, I don't like it. It's my choice if I want to read the mystery or not, you don't have to tell me that I should read it. This is just my opinion though.

First Chapter
Again, it's just a lot of chaos in the first chapter. In that small about 300-400 words chapter, you changed point of view three times. That's a lot. You should hold your story instead of rushing it. There were problems with direct and indirect speech in Arjun's point of view too.

Character Development
I read seven chapters and all I could understand was you rushed it. A lot. You rushed to jump right into the story whereas you should have taken your time building the story. There are so many characters, one is a cop, one is a doctor, then the leads, then Bonnie, then Aryan, then Sam and Neil. It's a lot. Amidst so many characters, you completely missed out on the development. It was as if you shaped the characters in such a way that it becomes easy for you to show the scenes like one is a doctor so kidnap his son and make him lie. One is a cop so get a bomb squad in no time. See, I am being honest here, it felt very much hypothetical.

Plot Development and Plot holes
Plot development was like a hundred metres race. Very fast. So many things happening. Someone is getting stabbed, someone is having sex, someone's son is getting kidnapped, a bomb is being activated, patient is being shifted. So many things. You need to understand that just because you want cliffhangers, you can't leave your chapters unfinished. It felt like one scene has not ended properly that you jumped to the next.

In case of plot holes, I could find a lot of them. Like Aryan being more advanced than the bomb squad, Aryan having high class masks which in Mission Impossible also, Tom Cruise got after fighting a lot. But here Aryan is making such masks so easily. Next, if Bonnie didn't want Arjun and Radhika together, she would never ever address them as 'Ardhika'. Nobody does that. Kidnapping is like the easiest thing. Arjun also has a high class bracelet which can track location.

Grammar and Detailing
Grammar is a major minus point for you. There were tense problems, punctuation problems, dialogue quoting problems, point of view problems, misused words. You should start editing your book.

Detailing was not up to the mark, though it was the nest thing in your story. You need to detail your characters' features more but you did detail the settings. Work on your writing, read more books, reading always helps.

Overall Rating
2