Author: @sappphiresnow_

The Review

Cover, Title and Description

The cover is really really really good. Like it's fantastic. Very eye-catching. The pictures of the leads along with a train not to forget that lantern kind of thing and the perfect fonts. I loved the cover. Kudos to the cover maker!

Title is really good as well. Ride and Bride rhyme so it leaves a mark on your readers' mind.

The idea of the description is nice but there are some grammatical mistakes in it like, while you were writing Sanskaar's part, you messed up in the tenses in the last line. You wrote 'meet' instead of 'met'.

In Swara's introduction, the first line is faulty, you could have simply written 'meet her family' instead of 'meet with her family' and it should have been 'three long years' not 'long three years'.

I didn't get the last paragraph, who's Payal? Shouldn't it have been Swara? Because she is the one who met Sanskaar in the train right?

First Chapter

The first chapter was a bit emotional. You showed how Sanskaar ended up being a T. C. I feel you could have stretched it a bit, like you could have said Sanskaar heard a girl's voice, he was mesmerized at that moment. Something like that.

It showed Sanskaar's simplicity and how he is happy with his job because he doesn't have any other choice. His care towards his family, love for his father. It was nice to read that.

Character Development

I read 5 chapters and I could see the characters developed to some extend. There was not much of Sanskaar's point of view but his character was already developed in the first chapter. We can't expect him to be more mature than that.

Whereas Swara was, well, she was a girl full of positivity, waiting to reach Rampur and meet her family. Her emotions when she saw her brother in the station was well portrayed.

Plot and Storyline

Okay so plot is cool, gliding in it's own sweet pace. There's some minor plot holes like, in the station sequence, Swara and Shaan both used 'Mom and Dad' while addressing their parents, I don't think it's apt in villages like Rampur, on the contrary, when they met their parents, they addressed them as 'Baba and Ma'. It's minor, but important.

Storyline is out of the box. Not something we come across daily.

Grammar and Detailing

There's is a bit problem in the grammar bit. I noticed you forget to use some important words in a sentence, like, in the second chapter you wrote 'I just thinking about everyone.' You missed the 'was' there. Secondly, there is a bit of tense problem, you jump from past tense to present tense at times.

Detailing is alright, you could have mentioned how Swara's home in village is. As it's based in a village, we can't imagine a normal bungalow like in other stories.

Overall Rating

4