Title:  Lost to Him .... Her Destiny

             Written by : Prakruti143
                   
              Genre: Fan fiction

               Reviewed by : Pournu

                Ratings:4/5

                Book star:4/5

Title,  Cover and Description:         

I love your title. It is so cute. Congratulations you just caught our attention with your title. Next is cover. Again a cute one. The edit is good but would like to see something new other than the protagonists and title. Something that hints towards story line or plot. And then comes the description . Again brownie points for this lengthy description which leaves us hanging what is gonna happen? Will love win over revenge? Come lets peek in to know what happens next. So for the cover title and description you get  4/5 . Do be creative with covers.

First Chapter:

Introducing your female character first has earned you an edge over other stories because mostly male protagonists get their introduction first.  You are breaking stereotypes again by beginning the chapter with a nightmare and its aftermath.  You go girl. Morning sunlight, sea shore and love at first sight, its just beautiful. Swara's relationship with her boss is admirable. Thanks for the lengthy chapter. Sanskar's introduction was also quite different but it was nice. The surroundings are also well described.  Mr.Agerwal seems to be a kind man. Swara's emotions are well described. Introducing other characters on the pretense of introducing them to Swara that's a new way to introduce to readers.  Seeing Sanskar lost in Swara is cute. Lovely chapter and lets embark this journey of Love v/s Revenge. You get a 4/5 for the first chapter.

Character Development:

That indirect character sketch was something refreshing instead of normal descriptive ones. so you earn brownie points for that. Be it Sanskar or Swara both of their characters were described beautifully. The battle between mind and heart is always the difficult one. you did good in portraying her inner battle. The chemistry between them is amazing.  The naive Swara and the obvious Sanskar lets see what a journey it is gonna be.  The bond between Swara and Ragini along-with Meera is nice. Bromance of Sanskar and Laksh is adorable. Wow Sanskar is being an absolute gentleman when it comes to Swara. Sanskar's  parents are goals man. How lovely they are. Lets see how these new characters play cupid . Somewhere all along I feel her friend lied to Swara. The motherly warmth from Annapurna towards Swara is beautiful. That bonding of mother and son and his whining towards his mom is adorable. Sanskar's cousin wow that was unexpected.  Swara's brother even though he is late he is cute. Kavitha and Sahil the epitome of evil 👿.   Jiya was a beautiful addition to this journey. Most of your characters are beautiful 💗 and they play a perfect role in making this story a  stand out. For the good characterization I give you 5/5.

Plot and Story line:

Love v/s Revenge not a uncommon plot but your story line stands out. Falling in love with your friend's murderer, solving the mystery behind the death and the inner turmoil of what is right and wrong it just increases our interest to solve the mystery along with Swara. This is definitely an out of the box thinking. Congratulations on selecting such a story line and beautifully executing it.

Grammar and Detailing:

You need to work on your grammar buddy because grammatical errors doesn't go well with such amazing story line. Also look out for typos. Please proofread once you finish writing. The quotation used in the chapters are nice touch of detailing but you need to work on those too. Try to structure your sentence in a proper way to enhance the story and also for the ease of readers. So for grammar and Detailing you get only 2.5/5.

My view as a reader:

Emotions:✓

Chemistry:✓

Bonding between characters:✓

Friendship: ✓

Love:✓

Creative plot and Story line:✓

Emotional connect:✓

Beautiful characterisation:✓

You got it in you to create a master piece and you did it with ease. Oh! that rhymes. Good job on creating a story that has our heart racing as the mystery starts to unravel. This one always manages to increase our interest after each chapter. Those emotions really get to us.

Conclusion:

Each passing chapter you get us a piece of puzzle until we collect all the pieces you can't solve the puzzle. Each cliffhanger and each twist it's just getting better and better. Kavitha's repentance was yet another beautiful twist of yours. Nice plot beautiful execution but you have to improve your grammar and check for typos. Best wishes for your books keep writing more and keep improving.