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Book name: The Boy Made of String
Written by: RowanCarver
Judged by: Jash_Parikh

Hi, there! Let's start your review in a specific order...

Cover: Simple, charming, interesting. One suggestion I could perhaps give is that you might wanna try to add some design and a bit more creativity to it. This is good, but you could really stand out with some minor changes and effects. Not too jazzy or loud, but this feels a little lackluster. For this, you get 0.85/1.

Title: Catchy, creative, unique. It is perfect for a fantasy novel, and it piques my interest, as well. Great one. For this, you get 1/1.

Description: The setting, structure, tone, and formation are perfect. Your words and the way you weave them to create imagery are also stunning. One small change, if I'm being nitpicky, is that the grammar seems off at a place or two. For instance, "The ones who don't perish on the battlefield, their creators fed to the Way King as punishment for their incompetence." could probably be "...their creators are fed to...". I understand you were trying to give it a grand announcement/narration kind of tone, but when you use a full stop, it tends to throw readers off.

"...substance matters not, and all made equal before the King." does not sound grammatically correct. Perhaps it could be "...and all are made equal before the King." or something like "But as the trials begin, little does the substance matter, all are equal before the King." Also, one add-on suggestion since I can clearly see you are a great writer - add a bit of epicness in your structure. Your theme looks like it is an epic fantasy book. So carve a select few of the sentences (not all, though, or it will lose its charm) to sound amazing, surreal, and out of this world, maybe even if just by a bit. Basically, make it flow in a more floral way. For example: "Survive his brutal trials and live another day, perish, and there is just one punishment for such incompetence! The creators shall be relieved of their duties...and their lives - fed to the Way King."

The examples are not perfect because there is only so much time I can give to each review, but I hope you got the picture. With time and a little bit of thought, I'm sure you can create something way better out of my examples if you try. Apart from that, the plot seems really intriguing and your description definitely makes me want to read your book (which is the point of a description, so mission accomplished!). Congratulations on all your accolades, by the way. :)

For this, you get 0.95/1.

Beginning, Plot, Grammar: The artwork is amazing, and it shows how serious a writer you are. Kudos! Okay, I really don't have much feedback here. I was genuinely hooked to your plot from the very first line. Your plot is unique, you have an amazing imagination and a great ability to put your thoughts into words that are actually impactful.

One small thing I would say is again, add an epic tone. You could do better by creating dialogues that are less wordy but more impactful. The thing I love the most is how you mix fillers with events. You don't waste time briefing the readers about the settings and the world you have created, but at the same time do not leave them hanging in the dark. You could be a tad more descriptive about the surroundings to help us imagine the events as they unfold.

Another thing you could maybe work on is to try to get your book to connect emotionally with the audience. I don't mean make them cry, but your book usually gives feels like oh wow, something like reading a regal work. It feels good to read it, but it could definitely use some emotional feels and moments where things are a little less regal and a bit more normal-ish, just so you can connect with your readers there.

Apart from these very minor things, this book is genuinely amazing, and I'm glad I came across such a hooking read. For this, you get 2/2.

Your total score: 4.8/5. 

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