Before you begin, please read chapter 1 of this book titled 'Welcome', if you haven't already read it. Then, you can come back and read the reviews.

Book name: Eternal Fire || Completed ||

Written by  Loves_Writing2704

Genre: Fantasy

Judged by Jash_Parikh

Hi, there! Let's start your review in a specific order...

Cover

It could be much better designed and have better uniqueness and creativity than this. Also, the author's name is not visible even from my laptop, I can only imagine the visibility from a mobile device. Add a more attractive background and designs to make the cover stand out. A picture of a red dragon with the title isn't the best one can do. I understand your aim may have been an exquisitely classy and simplistic cover, but it's a hard thing to be successful at, in my humble opinion.

If not all this, at least change the font style of the author's name so as to make it look a bit more appealing? I understand you were going for the majestic look rather than the jazzy one, but in that case, you might at least wanna work a bit on the font. And add a catchphrase or a sentence about your book, maybe? 

For this cover, you get 0.35/1.

Title

Catchy, unique, and a perfect blend between fancy and simple. I specifically like that you mention that the book is completed - it will definitely attract more readers. For this, you get 0.9/1.

Description

The grammar at certain points is not up to the mark. By grammar, I mean there are punctuation errors. I would like you to google the following (if you're not familiar with them) - em-dash and en-dash.

These two dashes should be used as needed, rather than commas you have at certain places. For instance, "The fire you love, you will hate, for it could mean the loss of everything."  should be "The fire you love, you will hate - for it could mean the loss of everything." (Please note, even here I have the wrong (en-dash) dash when it should be an em-dash due to Wattpad not supporting it. You can use MS Word for the dashes, then copy-paste the chapters on Wattpad)

Even the last line should be The deities are watching - when they aren't arguing. There are more, I'm sure if you understood the concept you can look for them yourself.

Apart from these errors, the description does not sound particularly appealing to me. Why? A number of reasons.

1. The grammar seems off at many points that deters me from reading beyond a few lines

2. The writing structure is inconsistent and the tone is very bland

3. There is no detail or info that would particularly hook me up or make me go 'wow, gotta read this!'

And much more.

I think the best start for you would be to get an editor on board and fix the grammar and punctuation mistakes. Then, you can focus on how to make the description sound catchy. Since your vocab is good and your grammar will be fixed, the description as a whole will look much better. 

For this description, you get 0.65/1. 

Beginning, Plot, and Overall Book

Since you're probably plotting of creative ways to kill me for all the criticism I've given up above, I will be super-short here: grammar needs fixing, vocab is cool, the plot is original, the sequence of sub-plots is well thought of.

The amount of thought you must've put in coming up with every detail that you did is simply amazing. I love your writing style and dialogue delivery. I love how relatable and casual your conversations are and how your action sequences are so well-written. To be honest, you write those sequences better than me, so naturally, I respect you more as a writer! 

One thing I'd like to see more is the description of the surroundings and the universe where your story is based. Overall I really liked your book and I believe that your description is what is not taking your number of readers to full potential. Work on that and you should be golden. 

For the final category, you get 1.9/2. 

Your total score is 3.8/5 (This score makes this a 4-star book)

Note to the author - with a better description and cover, this could've been a 5.5-star book - the highest honor at the Mystical Awards. Fix it and come back to earn it, maybe? In either case, good luck with your future!

THIS BOOK HAS BEEN JUDGED MODERATELY, NEITHER TOO HARSHLY & NOR TOO LENIENTLY. FOR ANY QUESTIONS OR QUERIES, FEEL FREE TO COMMENT HERE OR PM ME.

P.S. - Ignore any typos, if found ;)