Review System: The good, the bad, the truth and the helpful.

Author: @Sam_le_fou

Chapters Read: 1/7

Genre: Mystery

The Good: Your writing is beautiful. The descriptions are very in dept and beautifully written. You could picture everything in your mind and everything was going at a nice pace where it wasn't too fast or slow. We learn a lot about the characters without it seeming forced or pushed. Overall, it had a nice flow to it and I like the characters so far.

The Bad: The actual plot of the story is a little confusing as the description does not explain very well what is/might/is going to happen. The chapter titles were also a bit long and hard to understand. There were a couple grammatical errors but nothing that can't quickly be fixed. Although they were beautiful, the descriptions were a bit long and sometimes hard to keep track of what was happening due to being lost in all of it. Lots of information was being handed to readers at times where it's a lot to memorize for just one chapter.

The Truth: During the reading, I sometimes got a bit lost in what was happening and where we were. Especially from switching from the desert to the city; the transition was a bit tough. The descriptions were so in detail and while beautiful was very lengthy and hard to focus on what was actually happening at the moment.

The Helpful: It seems like you worked very hard on this book and it is appreciated but getting a program like Grammarly might help with some typos and corrections that need to be made. Tone down the length of the description but also keep them coming, if anything it adds character to the story. Connect with readers a bit more so that while reading it's not just another super refined read you were forced to read in High School but something you've chosen to read. 

Summary: I know I'm using the word a lot but, beautiful writing and descriptions. Just work on some of the grammatical errors and lengthy description and you'll be good. Very good work by the way. 

Rating: 8/10