harleyQuinnfan17

C O V E R

8 - 10

Your cover was very, very, very beautiful and I feel like it would surely attract many people to your book. The font especially I really felt suited your book, and the fog used really created a sense of mystery, which captured one of the main themes of your story. I loved it! 💖

O R I G I N A L I T Y - P L O T

7 - 10

I feel like your book was very original, and I liked that. I don't usually read fan fictions, so I'm not really sure if the whole Bella Swan's sister thing is overused, but I've never heard of it, and I thought it was quite an interesting idea. However the new girl with sudden attention from a couple of hot guys in a small town, is something I've heard of- many many times. BUT, considering this is a fan fiction, and you have to make the world and characters as similar to Twilight as possible, you delivered your story really well, and I loved the way things were written.

SPaG

8 - 10

I didn't see many mistakes, which was refreshing. You've clearly done a lot of editing. There were some small mistakes here and there, but they were minimal and easily fixable.

D E T A I L / D E S C R I P T I O N S

5 - 10

In your book, I noticed that a lot of the time instead of describing places, objects or outfits, you'd show a picture of them. Now I get it with outfits, as it's hard to describe them without sounding awkward and descriptions of them are not really necessary. However, if your book gets published, you'll have to have details and describe what you as an author can see in your own world, as your readers will not have pictures to guide them anymore. It's your job to ensure you practice writing descriptions more, so you'll be ready for a time when (surely) one day your books will be published.

P R E S E N T A T I O N

6 - 10

Your presentation was good, it was inviting and intriguing; however there is room for some improvement. For one, as I said before, less pictures. (The outfit ones are fine though,  they help with the book's development.) Also, if your paragraphs were longer and contained more detail. Other than that, everything looked ok, and your book's layout was quite welcoming.

O V E R A L L

34 - 50