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C O V E R

9- 10

I really liked your cover, it was simple yet still really intriguing, one of those covers that will make you want to pick up and read your book. It was super pretty and portrayed your story very well. The only thing I could say is for your username to be a little bigger, but that's not really a huge issue.

O R I G I N A L I T Y  /  P L O T

7- 10

I loved the originality in your book. It was clear from the start that you had made your book as unique as possible. As soon as I had started reading, I was thrust into a world of drama and alarm. There was a sense of an emergency, it felt like I was there, experiencing the event with all the characters; and that is a serious writing skill ♥

However, although your plot was good and very interesting, this is where you lost points. I felt like your plot was very rushed, and at some parts I had no idea what was going on. Spend more time on your scenes, so your reader constantly is moving along with the plot, and doesn't get lost along the way way.

Other than that,  I thought it was a marvellous idea, and with a little more development, it will be perfect! ♥

SPaG

6- 10

I did notice quite a few mistakes here and there, for example, at some points there were names without capital letters. However, it's nothing you can't fix with a quick read over, and I'm sure you'll straighten things up easily.

D E T A I L /  D E S C R I P T I O N S

5 - 10

I said before that at some stages I felt quite lost, and that is because of the lack of detail in your story. It would help to have more detail on what happened to her, how they got to the hospital, etc. And descriptions on how the hospital room looked, how she looked when she was hurt, etc.

However, what you did to really well, was portraying how the characters felt after the incident beautifully. I felt their pain, their worry, their sadness. And that is what brought your points up for me.

P R E S E N T A T I O N

9- 10

I loved the structure and presentation of your book, which I believed was done very thoughtfully and excellently. I have never seen a book laid out in such a way as yours, and needless to say I thought it looked wonderful. It was capturing, intriguing, and created a captivating atmosphere around your book.

O V E R A L L

36 - 50