Author: writer_38 MaryamAbdullahM

1. Title:

I think the title is perfect. It gives me nice, happy vibes. It's simple and effective. It's sounds pretty and aesthetic. No correction needed.

2. Blurb:

I liked the sentence "perfect...to be pictured." It ties in with the title and I think that's so fitting. But the last sentence "read on to find out" imo is not required because people will read your story regardless of that if they liked your blurb/title/cover. We want your blurb to sound less of an advertisement too. Also the description of the characters in the blurb could be elevated. I liked the portion where you said "mixed with..."
It was blurb material. But you should give more details of the plot rather than an introduction of your characters in the blurb. This will hook in your readers.

3. Characters:

I think your characters are wholesome! It gives me fluff, heartwarming story vibes. But be careful to not make your characters too childish. Make sure the CEO has a side where she is strict and stern at work. It's fine if you want to make her very sweet and a totally different person with her loved ones though. I think Zayn is a good character. He doesn't seem too childish, which is good.

Nowadays the trend in characters is drifting to non-childlike, intelligent, and witty female leads. And the male leads are typically more kinder and easygoing. But sometimes the make leads are also cool and reserved. Depends on which direction you want to take the story.

4. Plot:

So I think the plot is centred around marriage. I think it would be cool if you included elements beyond that as well to create more drama and a stronger plot. Make business drama happen for  the female lead. Make Zayn involved with that drama. I think that would elevate your plot.

5. Overall picture/enjoyability:

It's a nice story. A relaxing read. Something that would be filled with pleasant scenes. You can take advantage of that trait in this book. Create creative fluffy scenes. You can include humorous scenes. But make sure the scenes are not too childish. When I say childish, I mean make sure the adult characters don't act too immature because that would make them unrealistic and unrelatable.

As for your writing, I think it's good. It's a straight forward style of writing and I think it might be straight forward because it's in third person. Normally writers explain the characters internal thoughts a lot, but it's harder to do in third person.

You can elevate your writing by describing the characters expressions and actions more. Describe the external environment which they are in more too.

Overall, I think your story is wonderful! A very relaxing, friendly read! :)

Good luck writing! ❤️