Author: -TanyaWrites-

1. Title:

I feel like any title that has the words night or darkness always grabs my attention or any readers attention for that matter. So good job with that part. Night Delinquent as a title is very eye-catching, which is awesome. But delinquent doesn't quite match with your story's genre and content. If you plan to make her a delinquent, then the title will hold more value and relevance. But the first word night is a good selection for your genre.

2. Blurb:

Definitely a good blurb. If i was randomly scrolling through stories this would catch my attention.
But I want to know what makes the female character so special. Why is she important to her clan? Is she has to choose between clans that means that both clans want her. The alpha king's clan wanting her makes sense because he is her soulmate. But why is she special to her own clan? Is she a rare and powerful magical asset? No need to say it directly if she is, but give me a hint in the blurb.

3. Characters:

I like the Cal character. He seems swoonworthy. He's mysterious and reserved which makes everyone think he's cool. And it's really good that he seems to have a lot of affection for the female lead. That is always a trait that attracts a lot of female readers. And most of the readers on wattpad are females. So make sure to really use this trait and make many cute scenes where he tries to impress the female lead.

4. Plot:

Overall the plot is heading in a good direction. It has drama coming up I can tell. But I want to know more about Cal. He's a wonderful character.

I want to know why exactly their childhood moment was so special. Why did he get so impressed with her that he tried to visit her seven times?

Make it a really cute backstory of how they met or really sad heartwrenching backstory. Make the audience feel something.

You have to include the how the met (mud pie incident) flashback somewhere at the beginning of the story. Not afterwards. We have to know more about what happened between them as kids because trust me that's what will make the readers more immersed into your story.

5. Overall picture/enjoyability:

It's a good plot. It has a lot of potential. Make sure to create alot of chemistry between the two main characters in order to keep readers interested during the non-action filled parts. Don't make the female lead too mean or rude to the male lead because that's a cliche that many readers are starting to not like.

Make the female lead more relatable to the readers. She should avoid making too many not very smart mistakes. Make her intelligent and easygoing.

Lol I just noticed that I'm telling you to make this happen or make that happen. Haha that's just the way I speak when I give reviews I guess. These are just purely suggestions for you to utilise however you'd like.

I recommend for you to describe the thoughts of female lead more and make the dialogue short and easy to understand.

Overall, I would say I liked your story. But I feel like the really interesting and fun parts are coming up later.

Good luck on your story!!!