Author: kundab

1. Title:

I think the title is simple and to the point. It's not too meaningful which is good. I don't think you need to change it.

2. Blurb:

I think the blurb is also good. There's nothing really to correct. It's as a blurb should be. It caught my attention.

3. Characters:

I'll be honest I never read a book with an eccentric main character. He's comical and weird. At first, I wasn't sure how I felt about that about him being weird. His character is creepy. Like his lack of knowledge on how to communicate with woman, made me confused. I couldn't tell if I found it adorable or downright creepy. But the thing is he is comical, and I love funny characters. It makes the book ten times more enjoyable. I never got confused over a character like this. I couldn't tell if I liked him or not because he's so creepy. But I think I do like his character. It's new and different. And his humor trumps his creepiness lol.

4. Plot:

The plot is going very nicely. I thought it was perfect until the drunk mother scene.

The tone of the book was relaxed and funny all throughout until randomly his mother was mentioned. Then it turned into a complete sad tone.

It was random and ruined the flow of the story. My suggestion would be to change the character of the mother. I don't see why she needs to be an alcoholic and verbally abusive. It doesn't fit with the tone of the book. Make her a nice mom, who wishes the best for her son and maybe tried to encourage him to socialize.

I think the dad being in the hospital too is not worth it as well. Make him a dad who is also weird like his son. It'll be a funny tie in. I really would recommend for you to stick with a lighthearted humorous tone all throughout the story. It'll be more professional.

But obviously all the above are just purely suggestions. You can utilise them any way you'd like.

5. Overall picture/enjoyability:

I think it was enjoyable overall. Despite my initial hesitance on the main character, I think I like him. He's funny. He kept the story interesting. If I were looking for stories to read, I would definitely continue yours.

Good luck writing! ❤️