The Runaway Angel
By BestOfJJK

Cover: 5/5

Brilliant! The cover completely matches the theme and I was pretty excited to see such a mysterious cover for a JJK fanfic.

Blurb: 4/5

A long one! Cool! But I think it's more like a prologue. So instead of writing that as the description, write it as the prologue of your book and for the description, only keep the lines after "She jumped."

Then describe a little of who she is and what happens. Everything should be brief.

You can also keep this since I'm not saying it's not good but reader like me, who are very constructive, will obnoxiously find this a little too revealing to be a description.

We have read several books of this theme and that just explains that when she heard the sound of wings flapping, it was her hero aka the face of the story. For you, Jungkook.

We already feel how the story will supposedly go.

Chapter 1: 9/10

Again, brilliant! Everything felt like a kdrama. And I love that way of starting. Many authors start with how she woke up and even I did that in a few of my books, because that was required.

But you, my lady, made it perfect with the heavy rain!

Vocabulary/grammar: 8/10

Your vocabulary is quite quaint and I love the detailing of everything, starting from the girl to the flat appearances next to her, to her outfit and bag, everything!

Just a mark deduction is for the typos, which you said it unedited. It's okay, edit it out. Also, don't use "in a _____ manner" everything you express an adjective.

Once or twice is okay. But not everytime. Use a synonym of the same adjective.

And you need to show the actions. You've told all the actions. Like for example, from the first chapter, where the man was speaking loudly

You can write it with a synonym like " His strident and plummy voice echoed." After writing the man checked his wrist watch a lot.

Character Development: 9/10

Great again. I don't know if I should be jealous of you because you're a rookie writer and when I was considered a rookie, I sucked.

Storyline/plot: 18/20

Not the rarest of the storyline. This is also the sole reason why I could already understand the future events in the story just by the blurb.

But it's okay, it doesn't matter. Not all books have to be completely out of the blue themed.

Enjoyment: 18/20

I seriously did enjoy it. And the fact, that I couldn't stop laughing at Jinia's comments.

Impression: 19/20

Just the grammar and the typos that lost a point. But it's okay, whenever you edit, do it diligently.

Total=90/100

Hey there
I hope you didn't find anything too harsh and I also apologize for the delay.
Thanks for choosing me as your reviewer.

And also, I think you're Bengali/Bangladeshi. Is it so?