We Will Make It Right

By Tithi_bhalani

Cover: 4/5

It's good but not very attractive. I'd suggest you to make a better cover for attracting more reads. You can seek help from our in-house designer, lippe890 or try out some graphic shops.

Blurb: 4/5

It's also good but you can still write it better. Maybe adding some lines from inside the book.

Chapter 1: 9/10

It was a pretty great start and I was left with a ton of questions. Good.

Vocabulary/grammar: 8/10

The vocabulary was good but there are some places where you have made some typos. A thorough read can get them solved.

Some of which I spotted:

Like in the first line in the screenshot, "rushed to my to find..."

This should have been "rushed to my room to find..."

Similar for this. "Went to the restaurant..."

Please do not repeat same words in consecutive sentences. Read it yourself, you'll find it unattractive as well.

"The bus arrived in a while and I took my seat near the window. I arrived infront of the University, some time soon after boarding the bus."

In here, "sometime" written together is also a wrong form of the word you wanted to use. "Sometime" is generally not used to describe a small amount of time in form of a phrase. "Some time" should be used separately when written at the beginning of the sentence.

Don't use too many but's in the same sentence. Consider writing the thing more to the point.

Character Development: 8/10

The book is yet to start and not all characters have been disclosed yet. So I can not mark it more or less.

Storyline/plot: 17/20

The storyline isn't a very new one. I have read similar books in the past. I'm also judging a few books with a similar case in some awards but I guess I'm already hooked to the book.

Enjoyment: 18/20

I said I'm hooked to it. Let's see how you can keep me hooked.

Impression: 19/20

Lest the repeated use of same words, I like the book.

Total= 79/100

I hope you didn't find anything too harsh.
Thank you for choosing me as your reviewer.

Good Luck!!