Book Name : Overs Of Love

Writer : thegirlnextdoor7781  

Reviewer : Reeya_Reader_Writer

Apologies for taking so long to deliver the review. University had bombarded with exams. 

Cover & Title : 
The cover is fine, but not upto the mark. You can work a little on it. The shades are dull and it does not command the readers' attention immediately. Try to brighten up the shades and work upon the font style of the title. 

The title choice is apt. Short and catchy ! 

Blurb : 
The blurb, I felt, is too long. You can compress it. Instead of giving the character descriptions in two separate paragraphs, you can write it into one. It can be done by combining sentences using punctuation and addition of proper phrases. You might rewrite it as follows- 

"Sharanya, a MBA in her early twenties, has an outstanding aura. Dedicated towards her work, she hails from an upper middle class family who has loving parents and a stable job that pays her well. Hridansh, the newly appointed calm and composed captain of the Indian cricket team is a hardworking guy who believes in carving out his destiny by burning the midnight's oil.

What happens when these two people, belonging to different backgrounds, cross paths with each other? " 

So you see, a short and catchy blurb. It will attract readers and also maintain a sense of curiosity. 

Plot : 
The plot is a common one but since you had written it nicely, I really liked it. Instead of starting with a boring line, you directly took the reader into the life of Sharanya and I liked this approach. Good job on this part. The chapters are quickly moving from and settings too, are in a constant change and are highly appreciative. It removes the possibility of boredom that might surround your reader. Hridans, too, was introduced in the first chapter itself and so yeah, it was something I really appreciated about your work. 

I would like you to take account of the fact that your chapters lack descriptions. Try to give the descriptions of the settings and the background in which the action of your story takes place and where the plot is set. Descriptions of settings are something that I feel is quite elemental to any piece of work. It allows readers to connect with the characters and their emotions and create imagery in their mind which keeps them hooked up to their seats. 

The character development is good too. Rather than only focusing upon the protagonists, you made it a point to give equal focus to other characters too and I really liked it. 

Language & Grammar : 
You have used good words and phrases. The vocabulary is fine too. But I want you to notice some parts in chapter 2 where sentences are repeated one after the other. Have a look at them and a single proofreading will be sufficient to make you register those sentences and edit them.

The grammar is perfect. Honestly, I am a grammar freak and in your work, I could hardly find any grammatical errors. However, I suggest you reduce or almost delete the usage of ellipses (....) from your work and rather replace them with commas and other suitable punctuation marks. It will surely enhance your overall work.

Overall : 
I can say that it is a simple yet a good plot construction. Just take note of the aforementioned points. 

Keep writing. All the very best. Feel free to contact me for any kind of help. :)