My review on LUCIOLA

By the_creative_maggie

It's a great story. I love the description. The beginning was nice.

But you need to discern between the point of veiws (POV) of each persons.

For example if its Luciola's POV, you're not supposed to write what the queen is thinking in her mind. You'll only write based on what luciola sees or knows.

Also the writing is too clustered. You need to space each paragraph very well for effective reading.

If you can get these 2 done, you're story is great. I'm totally hooked and I have added it to my library!

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Review on Luciola

1) Cover -- I'll be honest here. I've read up to Part 3 and I haven't been able to reconcile the cover with the story.

2) Plot -- the story is immensely fascinating with strong characters who are evidently headed for a major showdown. It's a great plot!

3) POVs -- you write the story in third person but I noticed you tend to switch from one character's perspective to another's. This tend to confuse the reader and can be termed head hopping. You can rectify this by having clear sections in which you switch smoothly between characters.

Otherwise you have a truly great story. Good job!

jozefwacho
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  Review of Luciola by myroseswillhuntyou

Cover: Is colourful, a more prominent font will be better.

Grammar: Excellent

Summary: very good

Is Ariadne and Erastasia real names or fictional names? Looks lovely.

Will Ariadne be allowed to do politics provided its not a patriarchal society.

What's the colour azure fall into?

I think you're doing a great job with this historical fiction, the narration sets the story back in days like its supposed to.

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Review on Luciola by Alzara202⁩
By  Africanliterature
Nice cover

The  storyline is Unique and interesting

Although you do clarify between your description and the character's thought,it can still be worked on.

Overall,its an interesting book.Can't wait to see Lucy execute her plans

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Review for Luciola
By d_oyewole1

Cover,it goes with the storyline just that the font needs to show.

Nice story, I'm stuck to it.

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Review for Luciola.
By Keli__

It is a very interesting book.

At the beginning, I actually assumed it was an African story so I was confused for a while.

A few grammatical errors that can be fixed with editing.

The cover is okay and I like how other characters’ points of view.
namibianAuthor

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