Author: Todi_sassyweirdo15

Reviewer bea-ish

Genre; short story.

Title: it was just a dare. . .to him.

Package: Hawaiian.

・Cover: you have nice cover, it's simple yet very nice and I think it fits nicely with your book, especially the background, I like the fonts, but I'd prefer them to be a bit bigger, and I'd also prefer if you cropped the photo well, but apart from the tiny things I like your cover.

・Synopsis/ summary: I personally knew what this book was going to be about just from the title. And your summary isn't really eye catching, you know and it's not very descriptive.

・Punctuation & grammar: I'll start by saying, you can do better, there are a bunch of erros

・Plot: I have read a similar book to this, so I wasn't really excited, but the difference was that it wasn't an African book, and I have soft spot for anything African.

Side note:

❧ Your book is quite interesting, I love your plot and cover, but I couldn't feel your title, I felt it was way to long and overused. . . I also did not feel your grammar & punctuation at all. Here are some examples from your book:

WAAIIITTTT!!!!!!!!!

❧ That's wrong in so many ways, first of all the word wait shouldn't be exaggerated like that, and secondly there is no need for a thousand exclamation marks, it just makes your work untidy.

Helliiii, my name's Oluwatodimu Idowu but people call me . . .

❧ Okay, this mistake is similar to the previous one so I won't repeat myself. Anyway, through this whole chapter you were writing as if your character was talking to us readers, you should never write like that. It would be nicer if you drop small hints about your character, not start writing like its a biography.

You don't have to start writing: hi my name is. . . " that's why there's a part to write the description, where you the author introduces the character. And better yet, you can write an introduction chapter where you introduce as many characters are you like with a short description if you'd like.

Abbreviations also don't work when writing, and there is no need to put in those mornings when the alarm goes off, it's a big no. eg from book: brrrrr brrrrr 

You could write: as my alarm went off, I hissed out in frustration. 

Why couldn't I sleep for a day? 

Just when I was going to fall back asleep, my mother came into my room. . . .

❧ Moving on, to the actual punctuation problem, here's an extract from your book:

(This [ ░ ] indicates other words you wrote).

"Ooooo" I groaned as I turned to the other side to put off my phone. I don't have an ░░░░░░░░ with  mine. "Todimu I heard that".

"But Mummyyyyyy, five more minutes" I tried begging her. 

❧ Punctuation is the key to success when writing a book, and right now I can't see correct punctuation. This is the correct way to write: "oh. . ." I groaned as I turned to the other side of my bed, my eyes were still closed but I had to turn off my annoying alarm. I don't have a ░░░░░░░ with mine. "Todimiu! I heard that," my mom's voice suddenly yelled.

"But mummy, five more minutes," I tired begging her.

❧ Overall, your book is really nice, I like your characters and I can definitely relate with your main character, all you need to do is try to writing tip books on Wattpad/ you can search on the Internet/ you could come to me and I'll recommend books to help you become a better writer.

➣ thank you for picking me to review your book and I hope I didn't sound rude or perhaps offended you, thank you again.