DISCLAIMER:

Please remember that my reviews are just my takes on things, you do not have to take my advice at all if you don't feel it fits the essence of your story. After all, I am only reading a few chapters, other readers might have different takes.

Reverie's Review:

Here we have @Nohara_legacy's book "The Brat's Brute Prince". The premise is an interesting one, having two individuals be reluctant to be married is a common trope but the angle that you proposed, the political and intricacies of a marriage being the focal point of this narrative had me intrigued. I can see that you did try to deliver on that but noticed that in some areas it dipped a little and you got a little too caught up in the little details to deliver on the more holistic political issues that could have been touched upon. This isn't necessarily a bad thing but I would personally adjust the blurb slightly to have it better reflect the content. From what I gather the focus of the narration is Meera trying to tame her husband who is the titular "Brute Prince". Then again I did only read the first six chapters as that is what is out. If you plan on going down the political route I would recommend you include a little more of it in chapters 3-6. (Chapter 1 did set things up well so that you can easily integrate it)

In terms of the introduction and general hook. I have to admit it was a little confusing to follow at first. The who's who at the start of the book was useful and I had to refer to it a little. Perhaps consider moving it to the back of the book so that it's more of a glossary of sorts. My reasoning behind this is that readers such as myself just want to dive into the story and have it explained to us there as part of the journey. Putting it in the back for reference would circumvent the need to flip past the pages and get to the first chapter which might put readers off from having to start your work. Making it as easy as possible for your reader to begin the story helps more than you'd think!

The opening of chapter 3 is very strong, having her punch not slap subverts the descriptive trope which goes well to build the personality of your character. That being said your descriptions tend to lean towards the characteristic. The scene where he hurts her wrists and breaks her bracelets leads me to believe that more damage has been done to her than the nature of the injury you described. This is a small detail and example but it did affect my suspension of disbelief when reading your work. To make this smoother consider reigning back your active descriptions.

A factor that ties into this is your use of capitalisation. Play around with form, by all means, I find it fascinating when work is formatted differently than the norm. However, I would recommend that you only use all caps in a word very rarely and only for emphasis on the most tense/desperate/emotion-filled moments. Within this category of formatting, I would also point out that you can consider adding more action and speech tags in your dialogue, especially in the first chapter. The banter itself is good. The dialogue is sound and flows, but it gets confusing to tell who is speaking when you have 3+ lines of dialogue back and forth without the speech marks. I honestly would love to see this as a script, a screenplay or theatre play of sorts would probably suit this type of style more.

Your command of prose is good, you have well-structured sentences and your paragraphs are well-spaced. That being said your first chapter is a little long but the rest are of good length and I found myself able to carry through the narrative with ease once I immersed myself in the story. I would pick up the pace a little more not too much but enough to condense the work by a chapter or so. This will help keep readers hooked given your style and the large volume of information that is provided almost instantly. Keep the pace fast at the start and slow it down for the intimate moments between the couple.

As I read this I noted that you really have begun to find your footing pretty early on, with things flowing smoother and smoother each chapter. A light polishing at the end of the whole narrative would help even out the fluidity but you do have a good foundation to work from so the editing process shouldn't be painful.